Treasure Island

Marieta Maglas

(19-05-1964 / Radauti, Judet Suceava, Romania)

Tell Me


If I could twist your mind,
If I could change your thoughts
And if I could absorb all your sadness,
Tell me that you would give me a smile,
That smile so disarming,
Tell me that you would give me a first kiss.

Certainly, I would feel an overwhelmed desire,
As we encounter would begin.

Tell me that you would take me
To your heart,
When the gestures would become thrills
And some cries would become symbols of things....

Certainly, I would be yours
And you would be mine.
I would stay perfectly there for sure,
In a moment of self forgetfulness.

And if another one had been
With you
Instead of me,
Tell me that you would have felt so much sorrow that
You would have abandoned her
To be with me....

Tell me that you knew that I had known this.

Even so, I let you go,
Being unable to break that invisible wall
To be together.....



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Submitted: Tuesday, June 16, 2009
Edited: Wednesday, May 01, 2013

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  • John Knight (2/9/2010 2:19:00 PM)

    Dear Mari - You are a beautiful poet and a beautiful person and you pose your readers an emotive question in a very evocative Love Poem - TELL ME. The structure and content are praiseworthy and prizeworthy - TEN. V 1,2,3 We all have sadness - we all need to have our minds renewed. When we meet someone who dooes just that - we reward them with a kiss We know that that first very special kiss 'overwhelms us with desire' we immediately 'take each other to our hearts' and the wonderful 'symbiosis of love' begins.
    V 3,4,5 When two passionate poetic people fall in love 'symbiotically' they become 'one being' 'in a moment of self forgetfuness (self abnegation) '. Because of the cohesive power of the love 'We both abandon our dreams to be together'. Please answer my question Mari - Would you be prepared to break down 'All walls of personal identity' to co-metamorphise into one being with your true love? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? Thank you for sharing your lovely heart in this poem Mari - It is a mind changing sonnet. Love you in Poetry - JOHN X . (Report) Reply

  • Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (1/15/2010 2:17:00 PM)

    ‘…And if I would wish to be gone // in that moment, // tell me if you would have felt so sorrow that // you would have abandoned your dreams // to be with me....’

    Surely... never one will abandon such a Lover…at least I’ll not and never… fantastic poem….crafted bead by bead by love droplets from pristine heart…
    10+
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK (Report) Reply

  • Afzal Shauq (11/10/2009 1:07:00 PM)

    Tell me that you knew that I knew this,
    the proof was that
    I could let you go,
    by being unable to break the wall
    to be together.....

    marvelous... and perfect poem is this one.. style here is unique and very much soul touching..frank, free and targetted idea.. welll done mari..you are really doing a greattt job.. impressive..10/10 (Report) Reply

  • Anand Madhukar (10/6/2009 11:11:00 AM)

    A poem that comes straight from the heart and is numbing in the intensity of its yearning.10 of course. (Report) Reply

  • Prof. Dr. Sakti Chakravorty (8/2/2009 12:14:00 PM)

    ‘Tell me if I would twist your thoughts
    with my sadness,
    your kiss would bend me
    to be deeply overwhelmed.’

    Very nice ‘and smooth take-off’.
    Indeed great learning for me in placement of words.
    Twisting thoughts!
    Ten point zero / Ten a must for me and who loves poetry. [ILYP = I Love Your Poem]
    dr. sakti (Report) Reply

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