The Well Worn Ring … 0108-2k12 Poem by saadat tahir

The Well Worn Ring … 0108-2k12

Rating: 5.0


(Plight of an abandoned elderly social worker)

Drag a well worn ring apart,
and ring the middle finger,
with a woeful lonely part.
Then crashing let it linger;

slide by cherry's dull gleam,
in the rutted trodden path.
On waves that lost steam,
rest hand on craggy swath.

Mingle bliss in sullen gloom.
Full fingered hand that once,
dealt many a pleasant groom,
drab now lies a forlorn dunce.

Pale and silent sentinel lamp,
on tatty sheets that nasty reek,
shows mortal's montage stamp,
by casting a pitted puffy cheek.

Lone and forlorn attic act,
gone youth's silk and soft.
Plays a miserable tragic fact.
Scarce carps the creaky loft.

No steps ascend a dreary door,
pudgy lids, lug a sickly moan.
No bristle nicks a strewn floor.
A silent cry stifles in a groan.

Toying the pendant's worn chain,
that clings to her swoony throb.
Sills and eyes trickle quiet rain,
as Grim, awaits a shivering blob.


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saadat tahir
01 Aug,2k12
Islamabad.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
prompted by an old local drama and an attached commentary.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Captain Cur 08 August 2012

Very provoking. You used a minimum of words but addressed a insurmountable mountain of loneliness, lost youth and rejection. Powerful and well written.

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Alexandria Angel 29 August 2012

i love the poen it has alot of neaning and it made me start to cry...

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Karen Sinclair 27 August 2012

Saadat this is just so thought provoking and as beautiful as a cut from a rose thorn.... breathtaking just so sad and lovely.... a wow read indeed

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Elena Sandu 24 August 2012

Oh this poem is so sad that tears blurred my eyes. Thank you for share,10.

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Valerie Dohren 09 August 2012

Brilliantly written, very imaginative and descriptive.

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Simon Odhiambo 09 August 2012

Mind jogging and serious poem. very nicely done. keep it going.

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