The sky hangs low with clouds dark grey
Lightning throws sparks through humid air
Heaven opens drowning all in the way
I stand beneath with no heart for feeling or despair
Pictures resonate of a night such as this when clouds lay low
My jacket across your shoulders and your hand clasped round mine
Three moons gone now oh! Where did you go?
A Shell of one so happy and humble left behind
The memories are sacred though the bond now shattered
Standing in a field watching your silhouette forever vanish
My mind like a car crash, twisted, broken and battered
The Pain haunting dreams and reality alike, never banished
Said myself when you go your spirit will always live within me
Now I cry awake, cry asleep, inconsolable and torn
You never built me a prison, but I'll never be free
Till in new life your hand is mine to hold again
And together we'll watch a new day dawn
Nice poem Alexis, well written and it Is good to let the reader interpret their own meaning.
Thanks Robin, I did think that myself I just wanted to leave it vague so the reader could interpret it either way. You're comment is appreciated I will try to make my next one clearer!
Hi Alexis, The poem itself is quite good. Your formatting at word choices work well. The only thing I am missing is, are you writing of a dream, or was this person taken from you. That point is not clear and just a tiny bit confusing to the overall story telling. Other than that, you are off to a great start! -Robin xoxo
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I would like to translate this poem
Dear Nate, Your poem reflects intense feeling and the way you jot down your worlds through nature's preposition, make it even great. Pictures resonate of a night such as this when clouds lay low My jacket across your shoulders and your hand clasped round mine Above two are my Favourite lines.