hasmukh amathalal

Gold Star - 53,791 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

We Can Look - Poem by hasmukh amathalal

Lovely children
You are like bright sun
Any country may shine
With your precious possession

How garden may present show?
If it has no colorful plants to grow
When it lacks plan to take care!
How any one can think of and dare?

Such flowers need our attention
To blossom with careful relation
Free movement with mind to develop
Encouragement to new ideas with zeal nonstop

Poor children need not be neglected
They should be carefully groomed
If not more but with necessary education
Good nutritious food with enough of ration

Any country can afford little aid
That must go direct with words unsaid
Country does no special favor
It is our sacred duty with honor

We can look to bright future
If children come up with good care
The nation may benefit from their contribution
Such gesture must reflect in our resolution


Comments about We Can Look by hasmukh amathalal

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/4/2014 7:49:00 PM)

    Re: We can look (Score: 1)
    by darylg44 on Saturday, January 04,2014 (20: 42: 05)
    An important topic. You captured it well in your poem (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 7:35:00 PM)

    Another good poem Hasmukh!
    about a minute ago · Unlike · 1 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 5:49:00 PM)

    welcome rohano daudi a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 6:32:00 AM)

    Just about ok in expressing a missionary message!


    Adams Bodomo23 minutes ago
    The sincerity to throw out a message of do-good for children is surely there. The poetry could be sharpened: shortened stanzas and condensed verses would do the poet good in the next edition of the poem! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 6:06:00 AM)

    well expresed poem on youth and future Joshua Mayfield4 minutes ago If anything I would suggest making one stanza but overall solid poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 6:06:00 AM)

    Ashraful Musaddeq likes this. Ashraful Musaddeq If children come up with good care a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 53,791 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/3/2014 5:22:00 AM)

    Lovely children
    You are like bright sun (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 3, 2014

Poem Edited: Friday, January 3, 2014


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