Two suns, two skies
High above and deep below
Flowing gold in incandescent streams
Pelicans fly in the curve of shore
Mellowing sun a kingly retreat
Lulling sounds on the beach
Whispers of evening
Waves embracing
Longings awaken
Take flight with soaring birds
As ocean mirrors the evening sky
it is listening good, no, very good, while reading and flashes back a terrific image where it has the poetic beauty..structure and diction is excellent in over all sense but use of language, though apparently marvellous but at the end it has some obscurity, i think you use some tactical sentences where we can omit 'linking words '' but what about 'helping verbs ''? i hope you will reply..''Longings, awaken Take flight with soaring birds when ocean mirrors the sky.................................'' is suited more, just a suggestion......enjoyed the really, giving you 10
Mirror reflection refraction ours behavior and attitude is like this, we are mirroring either of Virtue or the vice this poem which you wrote has a great value for the humanity
Great use of images to convey what you felt when viewing that picture.
Bombastic use of language & imagery...as projector enhances the beauty of pic, ur poem did so..
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
symbolic, body and soul, earth and sky, evening and morning. I like this poem, my dear poet, it reflects duality in oneness. thanks. Please read my poems and comment.