Without your precious love
I’d be as empty as a drum
You’re my entire world
My stars, my moon, my sun.
Without your precious love
I’d be a lock without a key
You’re my entire world
My waves, my sand, my sea.
Without your precious love
I’d be as hollow as a lie
You’re my entire world
My clouds, my wind, my sky.
Without your precious love
I’d be a garden with no turf
You’re my entire world
My rain, my grass, my earth.
This poem is perfect - full of rhyme, rhythm and heartfelt sentiment. 'Without your precious love / I’d be as hollow as a lie' is a superb simile. S :)
Nice Prose my Friend, You will enjoy your Love through Life. Having Skills to express yourself in Poetry is a Gift. You have that Gift. Kind Regards Philip
It's lovely John very simple and heartfelt - flows very well. Thanks for sharing
How dry and dull life is to him without her love, but it is sweet and bright when he feels her love's presence. Interesting piece.
Very nice with simple thread that worked really well.
Nice sentiments J, I like the flow and content, very good, 10 Lynda xx
A poem that scan stand on its head for you. It bounces off the page with the rhythm of its reality. A well crafted admission of the depths of love in the easy stages of verse.10.
The flowing of the words is wonderful....it's nice how without her your life would be boring and unbearable but with it the world is a rich and wonderful place to live in. Keep it up
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Beautifully written with rhyme and rhythm and with much sensitivity and purpose. I love how the last line in each stanza is not a repetition which it could be, but it changes with every stanza. 10 Love Karin