What are you trying to sell
But then just give away?
What is it your dreaming of
As the night fades to day?
What kind of truth do you seek
In my old house of lies?
What’s hidden beneath the mask
Of your clever disguise?
Are you looking for wisdom
Or just some kind of faith?
Do you fear the white angel
Or the cold fingered wraith?
Do you become strong or weak
As you grow grey with age?
Do you love with tenderness
Or do you hate with rage?
Part of the game - WHO ARE THE PIECES AND PLAYERS? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?
Hi John - Good structure - rythm and rhyme also content - well worthy of a MAX. Poems which ask questions are always interesting especially if the adressee is anonymous. Because of the last verse (in particular) I will analyse it as if it was addressed to me. V 1 Selling - giving away - dreaming in the twilight of life. Personally I deal in TRUTH I dream of (possessing) WISDOM. V 2 Primarily I seek for SPIRITUAL TRUTH - The Nature of God - The Meaning of Life. We all wear masks to enable us to communicate in the real World, especially if we are communicating TRUTH. I wear a smile! V 3 I look for KNOWLEDGE & TRUTH & UNDERSTANDING to enable me to become WISE. FAITH is a Belief System - there are many and each individual must choose. The White Angel is a Universal Symbol of Peace - Her I embrace. The Cold Fingered Wraith is an agent of Satan - I abhor the Wraith - but (because I am a Christian) I do not fear Him. V 4 As I grow older 'Though the Outer Man perishes the Inner Man is renewed day-by day. Love is the answer to all the needs of the World and its six billion inhabitants - Love without Tenderness is an oxymoron as is Hate without Rage - I choose TLC Tender Loving Care. Yours in Poetry - JOHN
Do you love with tenderness Or do you hate with rage? Clever and interesting questions. I like the little word 'or'. We have a choice.
i afree with Jon, good structure, rhythm etc. with time better thing. the facets made it reflective of deep thought. good!
I havent read many poems who speak directly to the audience I like it, it's a very clever poem. What does this line mean? ? 'What kind of truth do you seek In my old house of lies? '
Always questions, never answers, wounderful poem, keep writing: D
hi john Ive wrestled with these two imotions most of my life but i plumped for love. good poem. terence
I amnot sure if it is addressed to your kids, John. The flow of the poems is superb, with meanings simple and profound.
I agree with all who have commented on this well crafted poem....the essence of which is reflected in the last stanza....it is we and we alone who can choose whether to love or hate and how to do either....10+++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Hello John...at last someone with rhythm and rhyme... either we are 'outdated' or it is the most difficult poetry to write... non-the-less excellent penning my young friend...have a look at my 'poet or author'...regards Alf