Ben Gieske


A Butterfly Day - Poem by Ben Gieske

........................It’s a butterfly day.
...............Not yet what color can I say.

.................The rain has just subsided.
...............The rainbow no longer abides.

.......................Yet its colors are
...........................spilling still

....................on the window sill
..................from flower to flower.

.......I found some algae in my aqua today
and didn’t know whether to be happy or sad.

............Then alit on it some butterflies.
.............Later came some dragonflies

..................depositing their secrets
.........-they caught me holding my breath -
...................momentarily we all met

.....................as if only passing by
................searching over the waters
..................for reflections of the sky




Comments about A Butterfly Day by Ben Gieske

  • Rookie - 0 Points Bob Blackwell (9/5/2009 7:54:00 AM)

    Butterflies, a butterfly day, a passing reflection in mirrored waters, make this poem divine. To really notice nature as you have, means you understand we are part of it, so we should cherish and care for all we see. Thank you Ben. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 0 Points Lillian Thomas (6/12/2009 12:18:00 PM)

    You have a unique vision, I really like the way you make the typography as part of the poem.
    my favorite images are:
    '................searching over the waters
    ..................for reflections of the sky'
    and
    'The rainbow no longer abides.

    .......................Yet its colors are
    ...........................spilling still

    ....................on the window sill
    ..................from flower to flower'
    What a beauty! there was only 1 line I wasn't sure of, ' found some algae in my aqua today.' I am almost sure but I have never heard this expression, Is aqua an aquarium? that's all I could think of. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 40 Points Ashraful Musaddeq (5/8/2009 1:35:00 PM)

    Lovely brilliant composition with nice imagery.10+ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (4/28/2009 2:53:00 AM)

    Just my sort of day Ben. We were given butterfly kisses as children, and my mother came back as a butterfly three times and help resolve a family crisis. It was a Monarch butterfly. So your poem is magic to me, and I am fluttering along with every word. Top marks for such a beautiful poem.!
    Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 534 Points Ernestine Northover (12/27/2008 4:19:00 PM)

    Beautiful, just beautiful. A delicious read, I so love butterflies. Captured with perfection.
    Love Ernestine XXX (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sarwar Chowdhury (11/4/2008 1:18:00 PM)

    I have got new taste here. Your style of expression i liked..........10++++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rachel Flint (10/24/2008 3:43:00 AM)

    when men and nature meet magic happens (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivor Hogg (10/23/2008 3:09:00 PM)

    You use colours like a painter I loved the last stanzx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 258 Points Kesav Easwaran (7/28/2008 8:28:00 AM)

    You say it is a butterfly day… just as in the case of a butterfly you are unable to define the color of the day…you find the rainbow disappear but the colors you find reflect on the flowers near the window sill..
    These lines remind me of Wordsworth’s daffodils and Longfellow’s arrow...his song…
    Again the watery green algae…the colorful bees and dark bees…the poetic painter’s mind is the sky where all these colors reflect together and pass by…
    Beautiful imageries through out…well…a classic poem this to say in brief …ten colors (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,646 Points Dorothy- A. Holmes (7/10/2008 11:05:00 PM)

    Ben,

    This poem takes my breath away...it made me happy!

    Dorothy (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Hemakumar Nanayakkara (4/18/2008 4:35:00 PM)

    A beautifully described vivid images. An outstandingly worded nature poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 22 Points Gregory Collins (2/21/2008 6:01:00 AM)

    flower to flower the rainbow is made to reflect the real color of the sky, great write brother, a dreamy and difficult beauty spot (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Con Nie (1/24/2008 11:49:00 PM)

    Great images here. A ten! Sincerely, Connie Webb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 29 Points Robert Howard (12/13/2007 11:02:00 AM)

    Magnificent scene painting! I wish I'd been there. The language is as free as the butterflies and dragonflies that came to visit. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Duncan Wyllie (11/14/2007 1:01:00 PM)

    A moment of reflection perhaps, or a seeing of something beautiful within the simplicity of things, Thankyou for sharing this
    Love duncan X (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - -1 Points Ivan Donn Carswell (11/2/2007 11:37:00 AM)

    There is a delicate naivete here which sustains the theme with its freshness. Rgds, Ivan (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,565 Points john tiong chunghoo (10/12/2007 10:14:00 PM)

    you have got it, reflections and all ben. good one. cheers. john (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Blue angel Florida (9/24/2007 8:47:00 PM)

    'and didn’t know whether to be happy or sad...as if only passing by...searching over the waters for reflections of the sky' - What is it Mr. Sky that you hide in the colors of the sunshine? ~ Loved it! Beautiful. Thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alison Cassidy (9/6/2007 6:14:00 PM)

    This has an e e cummings feel - fey and quirky with a robust, sweetly scented soul. I love it. Allie xxxxxxxxxxxxxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 29 Points Robert Howard (8/7/2007 2:40:00 PM)

    A unique and treasured moment captured with delicate artistry. I am intrigued by your use of occasional rhyme. Line ends match when you want them to, otherwise they go their own way. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, July 10, 2007

Poem Edited: Sunday, March 20, 2011


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