jerry hughes

Veteran Poet - 1,344 Points (January 4,1931 / a citizen of the world)

A Found Fragment - Poem by jerry hughes

'the Somme 1916'

I'm scribbling in incessent rain
and mud has turned to slush.
The stench of death is all about
and god's deserted us.

Last night I saw a young lad die,
he cried his life away.
I felt so bloody helpless -
Will it be me today?


Comments about A Found Fragment by jerry hughes

  • Roseann Shawiak (3/9/2014 5:52:00 PM)


    A very frightening thought so far from home and in the middle
    of a war. Can feel the powerlessness of the situation. Yet
    the power of emotion is very strong, it comes through and hits
    home. Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn (Report) Reply

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  • John Brown John Brown (10/31/2013 4:15:00 AM)


    Short but still powerful. Makes you think don't it? I detest war. (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua Maia Padua (12/13/2012 4:37:00 AM)


    will it be me today? touching...
    I can't help thinking will it be me today too? (Report) Reply

  • Heyyou Boy (1/12/2012 6:56:00 PM)


    A really good write 10 thumbs up WW1 and all war has taken too many of the young! (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua Maia Padua (9/29/2011 7:07:00 AM)


    touching
    written with all truthfulness
    the strong emotions are there to make us feel
    'I felt so bloody helpless -
    Will it be me today? ' I wish and pray No, It wont be you today
    and on the coming days... (Report) Reply

  • Estrella Resendez (8/2/2010 9:29:00 AM)


    the wonderful! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Patrick A. Martin (11/6/2009 6:50:00 PM)


    My father was bayoneted and shelled on the Somme. He died abroken down drunk tormented by muddy nightmare like you describe here years beore he otherwise might have. His war devastated generations of the family that followed.
    Great write Jerry thank you --Paddy (Report) Reply

  • Quin Faas (10/19/2009 2:02:00 AM)


    You frame this nicely with few words. The emotion pours out with power. (Report) Reply

  • Leslie Alexis (heaven Is My Home) (3/11/2009 7:42:00 PM)


    very sad. very good poetry.. very good at doing what it was written to do. (Report) Reply

  • Laurena Willetts (1/13/2009 4:37:00 PM)


    SUMS UP THE FUTILITY OF WAR. I HAVE SUBMITTED 3 MORE I THINK YOU WOULD LIKE AND WELCOME YOUR COMMENTS
    THE NIGHT VISITOR
    INNOCENCE LOST
    THE CHECKERS MEN
    YOU HAVE WRITTEN A LOT MORE THAN ME BUT I AM SLOWLY WORKING MY WAY THROUGH THEM
    PAM (Report) Reply

  • Fay Slimm Fay Slimm (12/17/2008 12:14:00 AM)


    This is asonishingly strong Jerry - - - I am not sure I have come across this one of your pieces before, but it has immediate impact and the raw fear comes through... very sad but potent piece...... from Fay. (Report) Reply

  • Emily Oldham Emily Oldham (11/1/2008 7:35:00 AM)


    short but inspiring and thought-provoking and touching. thanks
    Athena

    *** words will change the world *** (Report) Reply

  • Mimzy Sue (10/23/2008 12:24:00 PM)


    Jerry we are all so vulnerable,
    short but well penned
    Loved it
    'yesterday is gone, live for today and hope(always) for tomorrow' (Report) Reply

  • Jerry Hughes (10/21/2008 5:14:00 PM)


    Thanks for your comments everyone, Jerry (Report) Reply

  • Aijaz Asif (10/5/2008 7:50:00 PM)


    a very great poem indeed sir, a nice way of reminding that death is true lover 10++
    yesterday is gone
    my turn will soon come (Report) Reply

  • Ron Flowers (9/25/2008 7:40:00 PM)


    This is a 10, Jerry. I wish every saber rattler had to memorize this one.

    Ron (Report) Reply

  • melissa mundy (12/23/2007 9:43:00 AM)


    In keeping with John Donne. Superior work (Report) Reply

  • Fred Babbin (12/1/2007 1:14:00 PM)


    This worth a 10. You have nothing to be ashamed of. (Report) Reply

  • Amie-Lee ...... (11/18/2007 10:50:00 PM)


    Good work. I like how you always make your poems about war. It was a tragic time for the world, and this is a good way to make your feelings about war be known. (Report) Reply

  • Subbaraman N V (11/16/2007 12:36:00 AM)


    May be tomorrow if not today! God never deserts! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, November 6, 2007

Poem Edited: Friday, April 22, 2011


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