Dave Alan Walker

Silver Star - 3,936 Points (Pudsey, Leeds)

A Window Of Time 3 - Poem by Dave Alan Walker

I'm looking
out of the window
as I hear someone calling me
A young girl comes to the window
and says I'm your daughter lily
from the year 2033

Your trapped in a coma
that's why you see
images through a window
that looks as real as me

Your in a coma like dream
Inventing the world you see
just waiting to wake up in the year 2033

Did you really think
You was writing poetry
Did you think
it came from your mind

I'm by your side
at your hospital bed
waiting for a sign


Comments about A Window Of Time 3 by Dave Alan Walker

  • Gold Star - 9,259 Points Geetha Jayakumar (9/12/2013 8:52:00 AM)

    Wow. Wonderful poem. You are in coma like dream....Waiting for a sign..Brilliant write. No words can describe... (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,965 Points Noreen Carden (9/4/2013 5:56:00 AM)

    I am envious of your talent a brilliant write
    I will be going back to read all three again (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (9/1/2013 6:23:00 PM)

    your in a coma like dream inventing the world you see. a good write (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,395 Points Smoky Hoss (3/17/2012 2:45:00 PM)

    Another good one Dave; an amazing and wonderful story you have spun for us...thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 445 Points Danny Draper (2/29/2012 2:43:00 AM)

    Dave, here at number 3, I wasn't expecting the ending although it does make sense as per the cycle of life and alternation of generation. As a series of poems it also reminds me a bit of the great British TV show Life on Mars, which is a good thing. Thanks for the journey. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 113 Points Aleksandra Szymanska (1/12/2012 11:56:00 AM)

    I've read all the parts of 'A window of time' and this one reminds of someone who has gone through intensive care ordeal, abandoned by everyone...
    Can poetry bring relief to people who experience these things? Would they be pleased if they read few verses devoted to them?
    Thank you for the heartfelt read... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie shy beauty (1/12/2012 10:25:00 AM)

    this is beautiful keep it up... please send me some more poems (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dustin Catingub (1/12/2012 6:08:00 AM)

    Wow! ! ! Having a long sleep! ! ! ! A nice poem! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mehzabin Alam Naomi (1/12/2012 2:56:00 AM)

    Truely amazing poem...! ! !
    Great thoughts and well written..! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Life Goes On (1/11/2012 8:14:00 AM)

    amazing poem
    very impressive (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 71 Points Indira Babbellapati (1/10/2012 5:32:00 AM)

    mind, the trickster... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Deep Mukherjee (1/9/2012 2:25:00 PM)

    I am really influenced and honored by your poetry sir......... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Virginia Pecho Gely (1/8/2012 2:26:00 AM)

    A great write! The mind can see even in a comatous condition. Writing this, was in a totally comatic union with your pen....Keep-on dreaming for our pleasure reading your works of art. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Silentpoet Grl (1/3/2012 7:24:00 AM)

    fascinating write! I really love the continuing write - and honestly all 3 are quite stunning - Probably some of my favorites from you! Great job! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,470 Points Unwritten Soul (1/2/2012 5:30:00 AM)

    Haaaa...this is the good continuity :) wow you really have travel time machine...please let me borrow for one day my brother, i want to see how long i can live hahahaha...: P one more time you did amazed me..so cool :) _Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 63 Points Eric Cockrell (1/1/2012 5:31:00 PM)

    love the walking thru time... you've unlocked the door, and we all stand and watch! great poem! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 38 Points Heyyou Boy (1/1/2012 12:41:00 PM)

    A great poem. Something fresh. Great angle ie slant (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivor Hogg (1/1/2012 8:06:00 AM)

    Interesting to say the least
    .What the human mind can do.
    When it is not fully in control
    It can create a different view.
    which appears to be quite true.
    .. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, January 1, 2012

Poem Edited: Monday, March 17, 2014


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