Shahzia Batool

Veteran Poet - 1,483 Points (Pakistan)

Donation! - Poem by Shahzia Batool

A touching scene

earth in tremors

sea in flood

rescue members

nowhere seen

a begging girl,

in fact in need

horrid state

of poverty

a Flatterer comes

shouts aloud

All of you

stand in a queue

mam will come

and give you funds...

a mom cries

my child is dying...

flatterer shouts

No Help!

No Fund!

till... Camera comes…! ! !

Poet's Notes about The Poem

A sequel to a poem...DONATION... by Jayachandaran Chakrapany! it was intended as a comment on that poem, and still it keeps that this will render its full meanings to you if you read the original poem: http: //
thanks bro. for writing the lines that inspire! ! !

Comments about Donation! by Shahzia Batool

  • Rookie - 481 Points Danny Draper (7/15/2013 6:12:00 AM)

    So much is part of the ephemeral news cycle and suffering is like so much else in our teeming world of limited resources a commodity and there never was something for nothing. A very poignant piece deftly crafted. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Passionate Reader (7/13/2013 4:05:00 PM)

    There is an inspiring message in this poem. How beautifully you have summed up the attitude that has badly stricken the world. Yes they are actually not donors but exhibitionists! ! ! A great attempt! ! ! i loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 211 Points R.j. Wynn (7/12/2013 3:47:00 PM)

    Interesting take on greed and profanity. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (7/12/2013 12:25:00 AM)

    The poem beautifully brings home the fact that so called donners are more worried/interest about/in their own publicity rather than helping the needy ones. Now a days old indian proverb ' Neki kar darya mein daal' (do good and forget) does not find any takers. How sad? . (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 972 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (7/11/2013 9:17:00 AM)

    What a wonderful poem, Shahzia! You have very well pictured that help too needs display in Media! Enjoyed! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,531 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (7/10/2013 11:23:00 PM)

    Nice poem showing a reality which is unreliable. I saw another scene where the camera people were more interested in questioning an accident victim instead of helping. Thank you for this sequel. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 19,813 Points Ramesh Rai (7/9/2013 8:36:00 PM)

    No Help!
    No Fund!
    till... Camera comes…! ! !
    kuchh bike rahat k naam par (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,483 Points Shahzia Batool (7/9/2013 4:58:00 PM)

    Thanks Jasmeen for your visit, comment & question...yes, in general writing, ma'am is written with d ellided in this way, but the word here is used to indicate sound rather than accurate way how it should be spelt, there are examples which can be found in Hemingway, and George Eliot who use spellings rather than grammar to indicate class, accent and dialect. Your visit is appreciated. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,015 Points Yasmeen Khan (7/9/2013 4:06:00 PM)

    Sarcasm depicted in a scene so realistically, well-done Shahzia. The title with a specific mark is ironical.
    (The word 'mam' confused me, shouldn't it be 'ma'am?) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,120 Points Heather Wilkins (7/9/2013 2:07:00 PM)

    a mothers cry for her child should be heard. nicely written (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,656 Points David Wood (7/9/2013 1:47:00 PM)

    Out of despiration a mother cry and yet no help till camera comes is the only reply. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, July 9, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, July 12, 2013

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