Katrina: Stairs On The Water Poem by elysabeth faslund

Katrina: Stairs On The Water

Rating: 5.0


October is pregnant with November owls, smells of holidays
Wreathing round tables, windows.
No stairs.

First stories are ten feet high, with water marks, loose tin,
Loose memories of
No stairs.

Last year's October, barren. Tears miscarried, dreams in
Beer bottles; toys, clothes, food begged by
Fire stations. No ice.
No stairs.

Christmas of words, Thanksgiving of doctors.
Halloween strutted real...mad dancing, skulls worn
And uncovered. No treats.
No stairs.

Were you proof-reading the Ten commandments,
Knowing water never goes to Heaven?
On that sunset lake were shadows of someone
Stumbling.
Too many stairs.

You were always right, but not always on time.
You took from Heaven.
You would not give.
Too many stairs
Got in the way.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alison Cassidy 02 October 2007

You give the reader a series of stepping stones to negotiate their way through your poem about hurdles and unfulfilled relationships. Your images are arresting and the feel of the piece is melancholic without being maudlin. The stairs metaphor is magnificent. Great poetry. love, Allie xxxx

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Robert Howard 31 July 2007

'Proof reading the Ten Commandments' is only one of the many absolutely astonishing images in this remarkable masterpiece and my God, what a title! !

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Scarlett Treat 23 May 2007

So close to home that the memories flood my mind.........and tears my eyes.

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elysabeth faslund

elysabeth faslund

Thibodaux. Louisiana
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