Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

# # THE MOON WITHIN ME Poem by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

there it was..the moon
lying in the shallow rain water
a shaky moon..never
very sure of itself

what would happen to this moon....
i thought.....tomorrow
when the sun would drink off this shallow
what would happen to this moon tomorrow

ooh.....silly fellow
the moon would be safe up above..actually...
actually that was'nt the question in my mind
it was the astonishment that the scene left behind

the milky white moon was milky white
even when lying in that dirty shallow state
like i soppose the ' GOD ' in me....even
even inspite of the dirty shallow within me

Submitted: Monday, May 25, 2009
Edited: Monday, June 15, 2009

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  • Rookie Krishnarasa Seshadri (10/24/2009 7:41:00 AM)

    Ah lovely philosophy.....Visishtadvaita?
    but i don agree with 'dirty, shallow with you', coz nobody has it...only some choose to have it sometimes..... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mubeen Sadhika (9/25/2009 12:03:00 AM)

    the milky white moon was milky white
    even when lying in that dirty shallow state

    There lies the highlight of this poem. Nicely written. Good to read. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ana Zaldivar (6/19/2009 10:01:00 PM)

    Very meaningful and really beautiful poem :) nice one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Kranthi Pothineni (6/18/2009 12:13:00 AM)

    Moon and stars will always shine. Truly poetic. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Smiley Hooker (6/17/2009 5:24:00 AM)

    As long as there are poets like you, Sam, the Moon will keep shining and smiling for us. Great poem! : -) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Pandian Angelina (6/15/2009 12:44:00 PM)

    Meeru Samanyan kadhandi
    Baga bethavazhlandi!
    A transfiguration occurs
    In the soul of the reader
    When he with you stands
    And looks up in awe and wonder
    Into the face of God!
    Thanks for inviting me to your world
    I know I am going to read a lot more too!
    No wonder, this too joins my favourites!
    Angel (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ~ Jon London ~ (6/15/2009 9:35:00 AM)

    What a deep piece...the visual imagery is staggeringly good....well penned Sam...I'm a fan (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 791 Points Antonio Liao (6/9/2009 8:40:00 PM)

    just a total surrender of all the wrecked of wave in our life....
    it still stands and survives.... a poem that whistle the beginning
    of hope....wonderful my friend....God bless...a 10++++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 34 Points Maia Padua (6/8/2009 9:12:00 AM)

    very meaningful...brilliant thoughts shared
    flows with depth...
    expressed the unconditional love of God...
    ''the milky white moon was milky white
    even when lying in that dirty shallow state
    like i suppose the '' GOD '' in me....even
    even inspite of the dirty shallow within me''
    i love these lines...

    10+++++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 365 Points Indira Renganathan (6/6/2009 8:40:00 AM)

    Even the Lotus grow in murky water....great thought and metaphor (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (6/3/2009 7:48:00 AM)

    The moon shines serene throughout its shallow water experience. The moon is the feminine side of our emotions and allows your sensitivity and God to beam through. 10 Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Smiley Hooker (6/3/2009 2:42:00 AM)

    very poetic! i like the moon very much! 10: -) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Seema Aarella (6/1/2009 10:44:00 AM)

    Beautiful.....very well comprehended, you have come out with a nice thought, the comparison...extraordinary! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 14 Points Ravi Sathasivam (6/1/2009 12:26:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem indeed. Great poetic expressions.
    Enjoyed reading it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 69 Points Sathyanarayana M V S (5/31/2009 11:47:00 PM)

    This is a great poem. Reminds the sloka in Bhagavat Geeta:
    'Nainam chindanthi sashtrani
    nainam dahathi paavakaha......'
    The essence of Geetha. Thanks for inviting me to read this great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (5/31/2009 9:25:00 PM)

    Your creative vision is 20/20. Excellent write.

    Kind regards,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 13 Points Ravi A (5/31/2009 1:16:00 PM)

    The equation is good but let me remind you of one thing. Let us not coin our gross nature as something 'dirty shallow'. 'Dirty' carries a negative sign. Our gross nature is only one level of mind and life. We can really lift the level. We can consider this 'dirty shallow' as a lower mark in the positive scale. Now that the negative sign is gone, we feel a positive thrust for better levels. Remember, every word has a negative pull and positive thrust and let us always try to use only those words which would give the readers the element of positive thrust. Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Shashendra Amalshan (5/31/2009 11:33:00 AM)

    beautiful poem indeed...nice poetic expressions..liked it very much10++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie rago rago (5/30/2009 10:01:00 PM)

    a beautiful poem...... you have penned and expressed the vision in a clear way.... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Raj Arumugam (5/30/2009 4:29:00 AM)

    a poem of great depth and beauty (Report) Reply

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