Treasure Island

Samanyan Lakshminarayanan


# # THE MOON WITHIN ME


there it was..the moon
lying in the shallow rain water
a shaky moon..never
very sure of itself

what would happen to this moon....
i thought.....tomorrow
when the sun would drink off this shallow
what would happen to this moon tomorrow

ooh.....silly fellow
the moon would be safe up above..actually...
actually that was'nt the question in my mind
it was the astonishment that the scene left behind

the milky white moon was milky white
even when lying in that dirty shallow state
like i soppose the ' GOD ' in me....even
even inspite of the dirty shallow within me

Submitted: Monday, May 25, 2009
Edited: Monday, June 15, 2009

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  • Krishnarasa Seshadri (10/24/2009 7:41:00 AM)

    Ah lovely philosophy.....Visishtadvaita?
    but i don agree with 'dirty, shallow with you', coz nobody has it...only some choose to have it sometimes..... (Report) Reply

  • Mubeen Sadhika (9/25/2009 12:03:00 AM)

    the milky white moon was milky white
    even when lying in that dirty shallow state

    There lies the highlight of this poem. Nicely written. Good to read. (Report) Reply

  • Smiley Hooker (6/17/2009 5:24:00 AM)

    As long as there are poets like you, Sam, the Moon will keep shining and smiling for us. Great poem! : -) (Report) Reply

  • Pandian Angelina (6/15/2009 12:44:00 PM)

    Meeru Samanyan kadhandi
    Baga bethavazhlandi!
    A transfiguration occurs
    In the soul of the reader
    When he with you stands
    And looks up in awe and wonder
    Into the face of God!
    Thanks for inviting me to your world
    I know I am going to read a lot more too!
    No wonder, this too joins my favourites!
    regards
    Angel (Report) Reply

  • ~ Jon London ~ (6/15/2009 9:35:00 AM)

    What a deep piece...the visual imagery is staggeringly good....well penned Sam...I'm a fan (Report) Reply

  • Antonio Liao (6/9/2009 8:40:00 PM)

    just a total surrender of all the wrecked of wave in our life....
    it still stands and survives.... a poem that whistle the beginning
    of hope....wonderful my friend....God bless...a 10++++ (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua (6/8/2009 9:12:00 AM)

    very meaningful...brilliant thoughts shared
    flows with depth...
    expressed the unconditional love of God...
    ''the milky white moon was milky white
    even when lying in that dirty shallow state
    like i suppose the '' GOD '' in me....even
    even inspite of the dirty shallow within me''
    i love these lines...

    10+++++ (Report) Reply

  • Seema Aarella (6/1/2009 10:44:00 AM)

    Beautiful.....very well comprehended, you have come out with a nice thought, the comparison...extraordinary! (Report) Reply

  • Sathyanarayana M V S (5/31/2009 11:47:00 PM)

    This is a great poem. Reminds the sloka in Bhagavat Geeta:
    'Nainam chindanthi sashtrani
    nainam dahathi paavakaha......'
    The essence of Geetha. Thanks for inviting me to read this great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Ravi A (5/31/2009 1:16:00 PM)

    The equation is good but let me remind you of one thing. Let us not coin our gross nature as something 'dirty shallow'. 'Dirty' carries a negative sign. Our gross nature is only one level of mind and life. We can really lift the level. We can consider this 'dirty shallow' as a lower mark in the positive scale. Now that the negative sign is gone, we feel a positive thrust for better levels. Remember, every word has a negative pull and positive thrust and let us always try to use only those words which would give the readers the element of positive thrust. Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • rago rago (5/30/2009 10:01:00 PM)

    a beautiful poem...... you have penned and expressed the vision in a clear way.... (Report) Reply

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