Lyn Paul

Gold Star - 13,591 Points (17.03.1965)

Will I Fill A Room? - Poem by Lyn Paul

Will I fill a Room?
Will Anyone be there?
Will there be flowers?
Does anyone really care?

Will there be sunshine?
Will there be rain?
Will my treasured memories
Be shared down memory lane?

What tune will be played
As the mourners are asked to stand?
Will it fill your heart?
Will you wish you could hold my hand?

Will there be roses?
Will there be daisies too?
Will there be moving pictures
Of how we all grew?

I hope memories of me will shine
Each and every day
Too hope I have given something
And made so many feel okay

Okay to love, Okay to laugh
To know and accept we will all
One day take this path

So, Will I fill a room
I hope I will raise a smile
Importantly I hope

I do go out in STYLE





Copyright Reserved May 2014
LYN PAUL

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  • Gold Star - 10,468 Points Bri Edwards (7/16/2015 3:10:00 PM)

    Will I Fill A Room?

    Will I fill a Room?
    Will Anyone be there?
    Will there be flowers?
    Does anyone really care?

    Will there be sunshine?
    Will there be rain?
    Will my treasured memories
    Be shared down memory lane?

    What tune will be played
    As the mourners are asked to stand?
    Will it fill your heart?
    Will you wish you could hold my hand?

    Will there be roses?
    Will there be daisies too?
    Will there be moving pictures
    Of how we all grew?

    I hope memories of me will shine
    Each and every day
    Too hope I have given something
    And made so many feel okay

    Okay to love, Okay to laugh
    To know and accept we will all
    One day take this path

    So, Will I fill a room
    I hope I will raise a smile
    Importantly I hope

    I do go out in STYLE
    ===================================================
    “Too hope I have given something” ……….. I get it, though the line construction seems un-american; ok; you aren’t American! Maybe a comma after “Too” would satisfy me. picky, picky!

    [more ‘suggestion’:
    “To know and accept we will all
    One day take this path” ……
    ……personally (heh heh) , I would drop “all” down to the next line, in front of “one”. ]

    “So, Will I fill a room” ……… a statement or a question? it depends (‘will I fill a room’) on how small the room is AND how big you get before dying. this IS about a funeral/wake, isn’t it? or a retirement party?
    [plus, see below]

    ==================================================
    Bri’s FORM FOR COMMENTING ON POEMS:
    [“n/a” = not applicable to this poem]
    ====================================
    Poem Comment Form

    As my shoulder I did abuse,
    here is what may amuse:
    A poem-comment “form”;
    I know it ain’t the norm.

    But if I write comments TOO long,
    I’ll never hear the end of the song:
    “Bri, I Told You, Take Care Of Shoulder;
    You’re Young No More & Getting Older”.

    So this simple form I have devised.
    Don’t look at me! Are you so surprised?
    If I use the form I MAY have more time …
    to read more poems with, or without, rhyme.

    After all, I can’t read and NOT comment,
    and if you must have MORE input ……….from me …
    send me a request ……….., though “more” AIN’T free.
    ======================================================
    A. I enjoyed it: Yes _x__ ; No___ ; I’m not telling___
    B. I understood it: Yes__x_; No___; I’m not sure___
    C. I enjoyed the: Rhyming __x_; Rhythm__x_; Originality___; Cleverness___; Humor/Humour___;
    Seriousness_x__; Sensuality___; Humanity_x__; Alliterations___; Personal touch(?) _x__; Other __use of capitalization for emphasis; varied length of stanzas________
    D. It makes me want to read more of your poems: Yes___; No___; I’m not telling_x__
    E. The use of English was: Impeccable/good__x_; Deplorable/bad___; In between___; No comment___
    F. Could use proofreading: Yes___; No___; You decide__x_

    THANKS FOR SHARING. bri :)

    you ARE going out in STYLE I think; it just is taking a while for the final exit. take a bow. (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,353 Points Unwritten Soul (1/11/2014 8:28:00 AM)

    Great reminder as well good question that we need to have constantly...sure you can be a floor...why floor because u are the surface that makes everyone can stand :) _Soul (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,692 Points Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (1/4/2014 6:53:00 PM)

    Moving from morbidity to magnificence in helping us to deal with our mortality. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,265 Points Pradip Chattopadhyay (1/4/2014 1:29:00 AM)

    we all dream Lyn to leave our footprints in some minds till they're buried in the sands of time.
    a wonderful poem! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Bijay Poudel (1/3/2014 7:06:00 PM)

    Nice write. You will depart in style for sure. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 3, 2014

Poem Edited: Tuesday, May 26, 2015


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