Treasure Island

Geetha Jayakumar

(Kerala Palakkad)

You nearly killed me Neelu!


You entered in my life,
As a soft spoken person,
With fantastic poems.
Slowly and slowly,
I found that your,
Each poems comes,
A reply to my poems,
Especially at least one
Word you have picked up
From one of my poems
Made me think as,
If its a reply to my poems.
And as the days went by
My curiosity to find you out
Was got increased
Then some of your poems
Did irritate me
You really killed me.
Then some rubbish comments made
In your blogs by someone
Really irritated me
Because I felt it taunted me.
Really it was a terrific week for me
In frustration I posted
The poem How could you?
Immediately one poem came as
a reply
Oh my God
I just sat down
What to do next
Deleted it
Still frustration was mounting on
In my mind
Then I got an idea
I took a word Chameleon
From your poem Neelu
Then again took a few more words
From your poem
Finally posted it
Just free myself
Again I felt its not reaching you
Oh God again two times
Then deleted it.
I dont know
I have read many suspense novel
So my brain too wonders like that
If anything had struck
Like poems, words, or suspicious in anything
Then that one will be targeted.
I have been behind your poems
When I felt something Fishy!
It made me relaxed to
Know a female voice played it very well.
You really reeled my head...
I bow to you..

In my poems you will be the Neelu!

Submitted: Saturday, August 31, 2013
Edited: Monday, September 23, 2013

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Poet's Notes about The Poem

Note: This person doesn't means, I was in love with or infatuated with. When I said he entered my life, it mean in one way or the other way each of you from PH is there or entered in my life, it was not an special entry as in case of love happens..I went behind a person out of curiousity, cause I felt some suspicion, by not letting him knowing. I also said in one of my poem that I am so confident that I will never cross any of the boundaries, as I have only respect towards each one of you..But If anyone tries to cross mine, as a woman I have to be cautious.

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  • Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (3/28/2014 11:26:00 AM)

    Creativity is positivity and it does create and not break........Geetha...........so why be discouraged with negative sense.........very well put..........Geetha we feel your absence............. (Report) Reply

  • Krishnakumar Chandrasekar Nair (9/24/2013 2:43:00 AM)

    With verses you can't hurt or kill
    At the most spoil the thrill
    A Wannabe poet always feels up hill
    Having writ from his heart without frills........

    (Good poem and it reads like a serrated knife - Keep writing) (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (9/23/2013 1:38:00 AM)

    I fully agree with you Shahzia. Whenever a poem is posted, it can be interpreted by anyone. I take criticism in a positive way, as I feel critics wants me to improve or they wants to correct me. If this poem was not in top list, may be the critics would have been less.Your way of explaining was fantastic and you covered each points perfectly. Appreciate your words and your valuable time..Thanks a lot Shahzia. (Report) Reply

  • Shahzia Batool (9/22/2013 4:14:00 PM)

    My explanation for my comment:
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    Poetry is a mirror to life reflecting all the expressions and emotions generalized and universalized. The art of poetry is judged on many levels, both inter textual and intra textual, critical and thematic, feelings and presentation of feelings. For the criticism this poem has faced, and the readers who passed positive comments I am one of them and against the charge, I feel myself accountable too and here I would like to re-post my comment:
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    (Geetha, what a poem...on this platform you are blessed to perform any feat from this web-ground...any reaction, reciprocation, retaliation...all through rhyme...really wonderful...! ! !)
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    Poetry is open to interpretation, so as the theme goes, it was like an apostrophe to a character, (real or imagined) Neelu, my comment goes for its dramatics through rhyme, and not for the spell-check, or grammar-check, because some areas are understood, and although being the teacher (learner) of English Language and Literature, I prefer the accuracy and perfect presentation, but still we all are liable to err, especially the typos...a common malady quite understood which should be strictly avoided on the part of the poet, but it does not carry more weight than the respect and already won and earned credit of the poet for his/her other masterpieces. To cite an example of Shakespeare's play The Winter's Tale which is considered a great dramatic romance despite the obvious geographical inaccuracy and absurdity of expression, and Hamlet-the Mona Lisa of Literature bears the stigma of lacking the objective-correlative, but even then it is a master creation. The Mill on the Floss by George Eliot is considered a great work despite the alleged faults in it. Blackwood and Quarterly mags inflicted much sharp criticism even on Keats-the master. So criticism in itself is the part of the game. Grammar and spellings are important but not everything that's why every scholar of English poetry is not a poet himself. The pulse of the poetry-sites beats upon the tenor or a relationship between the poet and his reader, with their honest mutual cooperation and encouragement, and the linguists, scholars, and grammarians accept the phenomenon of Language barrier in non-native users of language who are accepted on the scene for many other factors in poetry. I value the criticism as an agent of improvement and it has acquired a literary status for itself. Best regards for the poet, readers and the critics! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (9/22/2013 7:17:00 AM)

    Aswath, I myself got surprised, when I unexpectedly found this poem in hot list..I was much frustrated that particular day and wrote this poem in one sitting and posted it. Definitely this is never one of my best poem.Nor I expected it to be read by many..I dont know in what way is this poem went on top list..Nor there is something unique in it to go to top list..It isnt that worth reading too...This poem doesnt convey any good message to take to top. I am really surprised how come this reached here...
    Aswat, at least you dont make fun of me... (Report) Reply

  • Aswath Raman (9/22/2013 6:55:00 AM)

    I was just going through the home page, which I rarely do and saw this one at the top of hot poems list. As and when I opened, comment of Lokesh Bahety made me smile and how simply he has put what I wanted to say, of course more bluntly. This poem of yours ma'am, is certainly not the best from your bag and I personally feel that you have better poetry within you and there is more yet to come. In this online platform, where more people are sycophants and ear-eaters, it takes immense courage and guts to say that 'the king is naked'. Easily by commenting something like 'wah..what a poetry' or An amazing writeor Loved reading it, I can ensure that you will read my write, but I will be doing injustice to you and will be deceiving my soul. You have every right to write what you want ma'am, because I believe poetry is about expressing oneself. But does this write deserve to be top in your list? I'd say no if I need to be honest. So let me join the bandwagon and be one among many others, who would like to see the increasing number of comments in their writes and top most integer.


    Wah! What a poetry! Amazing write it is. Loved reading it! ++++10 (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (9/6/2013 8:52:00 AM)

    If it was a date which went wrong or am in love you are thinking. Then I could have easily hidden it...No need of posting such poems, in which I am being pointed..If I am right, no such comments would affect me. We are still in a society where victim is victimised. Why to talk of big things of society...here the comments itself is the proof.. (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (9/6/2013 8:05:00 AM)

    POEM: You nearly killed me Neelu! by Geetha Jayakumar | Delete this message

    I am sorry..If you feel that it was cow dung. I cant help it. Only the person who passed through that phase will know, how much terrific it was. It was not just a time pass for me to write such rubbish. You know how you will feel when you are being followed. You will never know nor you will try to know. Place your sister or daughter in that place and see.
    Any way I cant convince you. Only one thing I can tell is Sorry.
    Sorry, for the inconvenience for it. I am really sorry that you felt I am doing it for publicity..Never, I have to used such stupid idea to do it.
    I am really sorry....This is the reply to Lokesh Bahety..which I posted to him.
    ........................................
    Still if you all feel, its just for time pass, I am extremely Sorry...
    Long back I forgave Neelu also.. To Neelu, I am sorry too. (Report) Reply

  • Lokesh Bahety (9/6/2013 6:54:00 AM)

    Hi, is the comment section a platform for sarcasm, or does the elite commenting audience actually believe that the pile of cowdung upstairs makes sense? If people ACTUALLY like what this 'poet' has written, i hate the Mayans for getting their dates wrong (Report) Reply

  • Neelam Rani (9/6/2013 4:50:00 AM)

    I laughed when i read this poem. Becoz my nick name is also Neelu. Nice poem MR. GEETHA. LOOK like u are in love with Neelu.huh? ? (Report) Reply

  • Nasarudheen Parameswaran (9/5/2013 9:56:00 AM)

    I thought of sending a message with the suggestion to re-edit the first half of the poem as it contains some mistakes in typing such as spoking, an reply, each poems comes etc.But, the message to is not allowed.So, if you don't mind please do edit. (Report) Reply

  • Neela Nath (9/2/2013 10:05:00 PM)

    Wow! Geetha, Geetha.I didn't know all these went on in your head.Really, dear.It's coincident.So, sweet confession! Yes, here's my special salute for you! (Report) Reply

  • Somanathan Iyer (9/1/2013 6:56:00 AM)

    may be like you Neelu also unrelenting and untiring. Let us watch more fireworks. Nice expressions (Report) Reply

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (9/1/2013 1:29:00 AM)

    A feeling through heart and mind this is he boldness of a poet/poetess we must write the truth I salute you Jaya (Basically I am a born shoulder) thank nice to read and think a heavenly mead to the mind 10 (Report) Reply

  • Shahzia Batool (8/31/2013 11:30:00 PM)

    Geetha, what a poem...on this platform you are blessed to perform any feat from this web-ground...any reaction, reciprocation, retaliation...all through rhyme...really wonderful...! ! ! (Report) Reply

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