Jahan zaib

Rookie - 82 Points (February 05,1981 / Malakand Pakistan)

A Day I Wish - Poem by Jahan zaib

That day when my eyes open,
I rush for everything,
Finishing quickly,
Things disarranged,
Dress untidy,
Teeth un-brushed,
Shoes not sparkling,
Words going west,
When east can be best
Emotions unrest,
Looking every moment,
Nothing but the wall clock,
Thinking all the way,
Someone waiting,
Waiting with a red rose,
Smile on her cheeks,
In a garden of Lilies,
I arrive and sit next to you…


Comments about A Day I Wish by Jahan zaib

  • Freshman - 534 Points Yasmeen Khan (10/19/2013 2:32:00 PM)

    A lovely verse depicting true feelings......... (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 9,802 Points Heather Wilkins (6/2/2013 1:41:00 PM)

    with a touch of excitement in the air you rush to meet someone you care for. nice write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Kishor Pathak (1/4/2013 2:42:00 PM)

    Wow! ...I finished it so quickly and it gave me an immense pleasure. I imagined myself doing all these stuffs, which of course is the beauty of poetry. Short compositions are toughest, but you did it so perfectly. Short, Precise and Magnetic composition. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 41 Points Banu Dai (12/16/2012 10:05:00 PM)

    very vivid Jahan Zaib..........u are a dreamer, lovely composition! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 41 Points Banu Dai (12/16/2012 10:05:00 PM)

    very vivid Jahan Zaib..........u are a dreamer, lovely composition! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Priya Arora (12/7/2012 3:44:00 AM)

    Thinking all the way,
    Someone waiting,
    Waiting with a red rose,
    Smile on her cheeks,
    In a garden of Lilies,
    I arrive and sit next to you…


    Beautiful Imagination..and surely your way of experession too. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 14,153 Points * Sunprincess * (11/28/2012 8:51:00 AM)

    very much enjoyed this one
    it is best to go out every day prepared
    she may be the one girl you meet
    whom you would love to impress,
    make sure your teeth are sparkling
    she may give you a kiss.. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,229 Points Thomas A Robinson (11/16/2012 7:26:00 AM)

    Oh to be so excited once again... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Stevie Taite (10/18/2012 10:28:00 AM)

    I sense the great excitement at just the mere thought of this day you so badly yearn for. Dont worry about anything but getting there, except maybe brush your teeth? You may regret forgetting that.; -0 Good write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 55 Points John Brown (10/11/2012 12:50:00 PM)

    This is a good poem. I like the sense of haste in it, but who is jahanzeb in the last line? (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,522 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (10/8/2012 8:59:00 AM)

    A lovely rosy poem n where east is d best, soo enjoyably pretty! Cudnt log in earlier. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (10/6/2012 8:46:00 AM)

    oh! sir an incredible piece, the love is so delicate and heartwarming you just want to get to it as soon as possible and you don't want to be late....beautiful just absolutely beautiful but then again it is written by a person with beautiful heart

    thank you for sharing
    love
    payal (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 6, 2012

Poem Edited: Friday, October 12, 2012


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