abhimanyu kumar.s

Freshman - 534 Points (31.12.1988 / venkatgiri kota)

A Need I Need - Poem by abhimanyu kumar.s

For instance, I open my doors
Give you reasons for why
Why I need you
No measure for stances
No measure for reasons
I be in your stances
Working with circumstances.

I halt in dark, with
Pursuing the darkness of your light
You are a need as the space
The space between you and me.

I get cold in summer
In the absence of you for
Which I need you
I ask you for your living
The living in my living
Compare nothing, for instance
The birth of you
And death of mine.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: ABC

Comments about A Need I Need by abhimanyu kumar.s

  • Heather Wilkins (8/5/2013 6:37:00 PM)

    a good write I get cold in the summer in the absence of you for which I need you. nice. (Report) Reply

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  • (6/27/2012 5:30:00 AM)

    very nice poem.i think ur very much passionate in writing.and i feel nice for reading it (Report) Reply

  • (3/21/2012 10:17:00 AM)

    Painted a good picture, and feel the passion in it. Good writing! (Report) Reply

  • (11/3/2011 4:34:00 AM)

    you are a need as the space, the space between you and me! what a piece very good. (Report) Reply

  • (10/13/2011 12:51:00 AM)

    last two lines brings the whole love kingdom on earth.brava! (Report) Reply

  • Jacqui Broad (10/8/2011 7:14:00 AM)

    Heartfelt love declaration? If you ask a girl's hand in marriage with this sweet poem, she'd say yes, for sure. Your living become my living. Till death do us part... (Report) Reply

  • Bernard Snyder (9/28/2011 10:04:00 AM)

    'I be in her stances, working with circumstances'(what a line) ! ! Very nice poem Mr.Kumar! (Report) Reply

  • (9/27/2011 12:47:00 AM)

    A flood of emotions and ideas............ (Report) Reply

  • (9/24/2011 9:00:00 PM)

    I think there is passion here and it can be felt.

    I think the the rhyme is over-done in the first stanza. Odd, because I feel pretty guilty of this myself. You should think about this too ('ances') . Be careful of cliche's - not saying this is true here, but be cognizant of it.

    The third stanza - well I am no better, often do the same, but that does not make it better.

    Good Luck!

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  • (9/23/2011 7:08:00 PM)

    I Like it Bravo! I Like It Very Consise And Straight Foward Keep It Up (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, September 11, 2011

Poem Edited: Tuesday, September 13, 2016

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