Fay Slimm

Rookie - 17 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

A Windowpane Wait. - Poem by Fay Slimm

Windy grey day blowing blue veins of rain.
My windowpane-heart starts to weep, lonely
For you. Then change of direction, and same
Window is floating with buds of unknown
Pink flowered hue. Is it bringing more news
Perhaps of us two? Discerning connections
I watch for sensation, 'though refusing
To believe you are gone. Now yellows reflect
A summertime-bright flash on my pane, love's
Explosion brings flames of warmth, and at last
You arrive. My window swings wide then 'bove
Dark mists, lights with blazoning sun, gasping
As whispered, long waited messages start,
I run to your arms, and melt in your heart.


Comments about A Windowpane Wait. by Fay Slimm

  • Rookie - 17 Points James Roberts (2/10/2009 3:59:00 AM)

    A very beautiful love poem and origional to boot
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  • Rookie Kevin Wells (2/9/2009 2:30:00 PM)

    Beautiful love poetry and beautiful imagery throughout. Lovely! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alison Cassidy (2/7/2009 7:22:00 PM)

    You use the emotional weight of color (grey, pink and summertime yellow) to great effect in this fascinating poem about waiting and longing and joining together. Some fine original images too - 'blue veins of rain' and 'windowpane heart'. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 275 Points C. P. Sharma (2/5/2009 10:25:00 AM)

    Well woven imagery and I specially loved the positive ending. Enjoyed it.
    CP (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (2/4/2009 9:49:00 AM)

    Suberb imagery. Exquisite, Fay. You are indeed a poet worthy of the name.

    Always your friend,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Herbert Nehrlich1 (2/2/2009 5:33:00 PM)

    Sublime is right. Fay, I told you before, there is love in them thar' souls.

    If there is ever any doubt in your mind, think of the Sound of Music's 'she's got it'

    Hxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Lynda Robson (2/2/2009 4:39:00 AM)

    A brilliant look at life throught the windowpane, I felt as though I was waiting with you,
    10
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  • Rookie - 0 Points Viola Grey (2/1/2009 4:02:00 PM)

    Fay, this is simply sublime...I actually felt the chill at the beginning being chased by the heat at the end...wonderful (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, February 1, 2009



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