Fay Slimm

Rookie - 17 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

A Day In The Life Of A Child - Poem by Fay Slimm

Cheeks dimpling
Two eyes gleam
Lips parting.
Baby's smiling.


Nose crinkling
Red mouth curls
Eyes are twinkling.
Baby's clowning.


Toes gripping
Two knees bend.
Feet are moving,
Baby's walking.


Mind wandering,
Gaze intense,
Brow is puckering,
Baby's 'pottying'


Lips smacking,
Two jaws race,
Cheeks are bulging,
Baby's eating.


Head bobbing,
Fingers twirl,
Knees are knocking,
Baby's dancing.


Eyes closing,
Two hands still.
Senses dozing,
Ssssh - Baby's sleeping.


Comments about A Day In The Life Of A Child by Fay Slimm

  • Rookie - 382 Points Ravi A (4/5/2009 12:50:00 PM)

    The last four lines are enough. You have rightly hit it. We can also experience the sleep. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 7 Points Deva De Silva (1/16/2009 9:52:00 AM)

    Simplicity and honesty in your tone makes this a wonderful read...
    Thanks.
    Deva (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivor Hogg (11/20/2008 11:14:00 AM)

    near perfection in its simplicity M lady (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alison Cassidy (11/15/2008 5:44:00 PM)

    A precious little poem, inspired methinks by old nursery rhymes. Love the rhythm, the simplicity of the language and the beat of the piece. Yes, a lovely children's poem for grownups to enjoy. (or vice versa if you like?) love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,563 Points Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (11/10/2008 10:34:00 AM)

    Hello Fay and that was just about picture perfect, I felt as if I was watching the little one through out. Great read! Loyd (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Bob Gibson (10/14/2008 1:35:00 AM)

    ! The most wonderful aroma in this world, is the smell of a baby in a fathers arms,
    till they need changing of corse! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Ashley Jarrett (10/9/2008 12:30:00 PM)

    I like the simplicity of yjis one, just like the life of a child. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Adam Day (9/26/2008 12:59:00 AM)

    divine. best word i can use. fay, you have a wonderful way with words. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Carl Harris (9/16/2008 10:52:00 AM)

    Several thngs jumped out at me while reading this entertaining and extremely well written poem, Fay. First, I noticed how tersely it was written, using a minimum of words to convey such vivid impressions. I also noted how smoothly it was written and that every word flowed into the next word perfectly. I was quickly aware of how accurate and expressive your words were as well. All of this points to the fact that you are a most talented and experienced poet and certainly a great pleasure to read. Carl. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 213 Points Palas Kumar Ray (9/15/2008 3:31:00 PM)

    Nice write on a very nice subject.He who have reared a child knows the joy of it.
    10/10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Aijaz Asif (9/13/2008 7:18:00 PM)

    another beutiful write sir...while reading i was imaginig my naphew who's 2ys now...thanks...10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 10 Points Kobby King (9/10/2008 8:45:00 AM)

    beautiful, i was grinning like a baby...you've made me wanna have a baby now! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dr.Wardha Jawdat (9/3/2008 12:17:00 PM)

    awwww this is suchhh a sweeeet poem...very very well written..i love the style..youve done it so well without overdoing anything....the love and tenderness shine through.delightful! ..a 10..by a mother..! : > (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivor Hogg (8/23/2008 3:16:00 PM)

    I was fortunate enough to work shifts when my children were babies So enjoyed it all inclding changing dirty nappia You portray it well in a few words (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, July 31, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, August 2, 2008


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