Fay Slimm

Rookie - 12 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

Bright Burning Stars.


To be called the above was an honour
Indeed, she, being shy, fought to dismiss
The praise, pretending the moment had gone
By without notice - yet unwisely wished
He would use it again - 'bright burning star.'

It rang with adventure, set her on fire,
She had only reviewed his work from afar,
But knew it was versed with love and desire.

Romantic, intense, it burned with it's own
Meteor fire, in which she now closely
Followed along. Besides, not being prone
To flattery's aim, she being bright at most
Word-woven rhyme, gave time now to dreaming
Of what love brings to two same gleaming flames.

Working as one, and somehow revealing
More about brilliance, that was the aim,
As inspired, they burned together in time
To make twice heated love really sublime.

Submitted: Saturday, January 17, 2009
Edited: Saturday, January 17, 2009

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  • Rookie Bob Gibson (1/22/2009 9:52:00 PM)

    Fay! your thrird and fourth verses captured me! , you left me breathless!
    regards Bob (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alison Cassidy (1/22/2009 12:42:00 AM)

    The sharing of a talent is one of the most powerful measures of potentially blissful union. I like the oblique way in which you introduce your protagonists and the internal rhymes that are scattered throughout this lovely poem. A fine romantic duet. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kevin Wells (1/21/2009 2:38:00 PM)

    Like a fine wine,
    you are improving all the time
    showing the world
    you aint just rhythm and rhyme
    A big 10
    Kev. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Lynda Robson (1/21/2009 8:32:00 AM)

    Fay you are an inspiration to us all, another excellent write from you, thanks
    10
    Lynda xx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kris Smith (1/19/2009 2:37:00 AM)

    Absolutely wonderful pieceof poetry from PH leading poets truly remarkable Fay thanks for sharing 10+++Chris (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Sid John Gardner. (1/17/2009 3:29:00 PM)

    A slow fuse with a detonator creates a poem from a true innovator.Nice one again Fay, Sid xxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points C.R. Clark (1/17/2009 1:44:00 PM)

    This is indeed a beautiful poem, Fay. Truly a pleasure to read. Great Imagery and a wonderful easy flow. I give it a 10++ Best wishes
    Richard (Report) Reply

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