He Is Gone. Poem by Fay Slimm

He Is Gone.

Rating: 5.0


Above the sad moan
.............................. of the naked trees.
Tnrough the pale leaf
..................... as it dances the breeze.
Into the breath of each
.............................. cool autumn dawn
I search for my lover,
..................................... but he is gone.


Behind each grey cloud
....................................as it scuttles by.
Under the blanket
................................ of velvet blue sky.
Between the brief
...................... glimpses of mellow sun
I search for my lover,
..................................... but he is gone.


Beyond the wide ocean
................................. and restless tide.
Over the verdant
......................... and high countryside.
Ahead of the journey
................................that's yet to come
I search for my lover,
..................................... but he is gone.


Inside the mem'ry
.............................of past happy days.
Below recent pain
................................in parting of ways.
Among the regrets
...................... which were dwelt upon
I search for my lover,
.................................... but he is gone.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Carol Gall 01 November 2009

beautiful fay so lovely 10

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Sandra Fowler 05 November 2009

You have painted a lovely farewellscape. Even nature joins you in your elegiac lament. I love your refrain and your musical rhymes. Always your friend, Sandra

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Carl Harris 04 November 2009

This is vivid and deeply touching poem of lost love, Fay, one that's quite beautifully expressed in every line. I loved your use of repetition in this fine write, one of my own personal favorite techniques. It make a poem quite memorable and very effective in getting it's message across to a reader. You did that exceptionally well in this melancholy poem. Carl.

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Bob Gibson 01 November 2009

A brilliant poem Fay! if i may say! saved in my favorite collection I voted it ten, from your golden pen from Bob with greatest affection

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David Harris 01 November 2009

Fay, a beautiful but sad poem about the search for a loved one that has now gone. I loved the rhyme and the repeat of that last line through each stanza. Top marks and thanks for sharing this with us my friend. hugs David

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Susan Jarvis 01 November 2009

Full of allusions to the beauty of nature which serve to highlight this heartfelt search. The adept use of repetition adds further poignancy to this beautiful poem. S :)

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Fay Slimm

Fay Slimm

in Cornwall U.K.
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