It took a pain to travel
A road so long
Had to travel it
I am face with connivers! Death?
You should avoid such road
And be moderate with his life
When such conquers
One is rich with wishes
That eye tooth can bite the pain
And ease it
Uncomfortable presence
I love nothing more that everything
I am creeping in the body
Like thief in the night
Liked it, I am creeping in the body like thief in the night a great poem, One is rich with wishes That eyes tooth can bit the pain a great write. I love nothing more that everything!
That's very true, but either way that road seems to hunt you for every route you choose, and that lives you with nothing but to face the pain and struggle, I relate very well to this write, it is so realistic and greatly pened, The_African_Son (Th³_ªfR¹cª¬_šºN)
Well written, I was really engaged with the pain of reading this poem which is always in both a readers and poets perspective, a truly good aspect. Sublime write.
Good poem....wish i could get to use imagery dis way... But d problem is.... I dont really understand it! ...
I am having trouble with our sentence structure- which has so much to do with meaning. I love your images even if I don't quite understand them. Who? What? is the I in the last two lines. Beautiful metaphor, but meaning unclear. I am inspired to read more of your work. Juliet
I like this very much.There are some places where the grammar is not quite correct It was a pain to travel That eye tooth can bite the pain? and ease it away like a thief in the night. You have a great gift for imagery, ........... so I think with a little editing it will be a really outstanding poem
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Like it, a great poem, a great write.