sagar patil.

Rookie - 2 Points (03/06/1990 / maharashtra, india)

The Lonely Heart... - Poem by sagar patil.

loneliness, this merciless loneliness
came with u, ur memories come u
let spring come again n again
i remembered again
the empty paths of the heart that adorned
the lonely heart....
it cried...heart cried....

the moon n sun are still there it is that sky
life is even passing by the world is passing by
i am ur i am in my self
the heart is full of sorrow
without u how can i live
grant me ur advice...

life has brought me to such a path
now fro ur shadow, i have become seprated

the symbol of ur memories are scattered every where
ur shadow is in every one of my things
its u stay in me always
u r near u r far
what is this jealousy
memories becoming tears....
embedded in ur eyes

memories becoming a laughter
even come on this lips.

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Comments about The Lonely Heart... by sagar patil.

  • Rookie Julie Schleppegrell (6/6/2013 3:23:00 PM)

    heartfelt ink my friend. nice write (Report) Reply

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  • Bronze Star - 2,814 Points Paul Brookes (5/10/2013 10:48:00 AM)

    This is a good poem, it could be a great poem but the use of ur u is lazy and English is such a beautiful language with so many lovely words Don't mangle it Love it and caress it like a lover. Use it to its full extent be brave, be bold. I see so much potential in your poetry don't take the easy path. Forgive me for being so hard. Thanks for sharing. BB : O) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 120 Points Persian Khushi (5/3/2013 12:27:00 PM)

    vey beautiful heartfelt lament of loneliness... love is in your cards little btother... keep writig your beautiful poetry. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,486 Points Patricia Grantham (3/11/2013 8:36:00 AM)

    A lonely heart is no picnic my friend. It can only find solace
    in love. Thanks for the write. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 30 Points Shashikant Nishant Sharma (3/8/2013 2:09:00 AM)

    Good poem, well expressed emotion. Visit to read more poetry... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,160 Points Neela Nath Das (1/31/2013 11:52:00 AM)

    Soul is right. Soon you will see the light of happiness dear brother. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,667 Points Unwritten Soul (1/21/2013 7:22:00 AM)

    Be ready to get separated from loneliness because soon what will taking over is only happiness, so be ready any where anytime soon, are you ready? ...cheers_Soul (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 11, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, January 11, 2013

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