Shahzia Batool

Veteran Poet - 1,276 Points (Pakistan)

The Sun Rises In The Eyes! - Poem by Shahzia Batool

After a long composed travel
the eve approaches by and by
spreading its shades on everything
of cottage yard
when the queen of night
spreads its fragrance
when the moon ascends
on the distant horizons
the stars get kindled with a glow
then the phase of night
just comes on wane
the stars take their leave
bidding their byes
and the sun rises in the eyes
shifting the glow to dawn on skies!


Comments about The Sun Rises In The Eyes! by Shahzia Batool

  • Rookie Passionate Reader (8/28/2013 12:26:00 PM)

    Every night is followed by a BRIGHT MORNING and yes, as you said, the sun rises in the eyes, shifting the glow to dawn on skies! ! !
    lovely work! ! !
    Blessings
    :) (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 39,733 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (8/18/2013 11:09:00 AM)

    Beautiful lines although all lines are marvelled but the last line so fantastically you compose sis can't tell the sun rises in the eyes , shifting the glow to dawn on skies! 10 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 27,331 Points Valsa George (8/7/2013 8:13:00 AM)

    A beautiful description of the gradual transition of a twilight evening to the glow of dawn! The sun rising in the eyes and shifting its glow to the dawn has wider poetic dimensions! A great write Shahzia! ! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,284 Points Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson (8/6/2013 5:14:00 AM)

    As a warm summer night should be as we bid farewell to another night's effort.
    Then relucktantly turn toward the dawn, rise and move un. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (8/6/2013 2:31:00 AM)

    The poem brings hope alive. Night is associated with everything negative and the dawn with everything positive. A beautiful penning. Happy writing. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,205 Points Sallam Yassin (8/5/2013 7:11:00 PM)

    Yes the sun rises in the eyes when the love is in heart (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,695 Points Ramesh Rai (8/5/2013 5:44:00 PM)

    xlent beautiful write. i admire your imaginatiion n writing power. amazing write (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,695 Points Ramesh Rai (8/5/2013 5:42:00 PM)

    xlent beautiful write. i admire your imaginatiion n writing power. amazing write (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,695 Points Ramesh Rai (8/5/2013 5:41:00 PM)

    xlent beautiful write. i admire your imaginatiion n writing power. amazing write (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,322 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/5/2013 5:18:00 PM)

    the sun rises in the eyes
    shifting the glow to dawn on skies!
    As Heather Wilkins pointed out, the last two lines is a masterly rendering. Beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,072 Points Heather Wilkins (8/5/2013 3:07:00 PM)

    a good write Shahzia the sun rises in the eyes shifting the glow to dawn on skies. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, August 5, 2013

Poem Edited: Thursday, August 29, 2013


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