Yellow Bird Poem by Vijay Sai R

The opening word really should be 'a.' This is the only error as such. The virtue of this piece is that it is very short and concise. Though it might even be shorter still. The best poetry is 'almost' always the shortest. You might want to look at this poem with that in mind. The problem, of course, is that beauty is sometimes sacrificed in this process. Whatever you do though, you never sacrifice beauty in order to shorten a poem. So. my advice is to take your time examining your poem to satisfy yourself that you cannot shorten it without sacrificing beauty. If you find you can't, then leave it as it is. It is a well done piece of writing as it is. My compliments to you. -- Greenwolfe 1962

yellow bird... how lonely that critter...hoping it can find a branch to stay...

Nice poem, nice lineation. Change the first word in the first line to A(if you like.) You can leave it like that if you want(remember poets have what is called poetic licence?)

big words so it was confusing for me...but it was good

well written, thumps up and do keep on writing................

Simply wonderful' beautiful and soulful..................Vijay......................

wawoo, it's such nice poem, i relate it to the human life on earth for the goodies.

A thought -provoking poem. Thnx for sharing.

Nice Poem, I have enjoyed it in reality. I have recorded these sweet melodious voices in my mobile also together with the Paper Buyer shouting 'Paaaaaaaper, Paiiiiiiiiiiiper'. That is also interesting. Everything natural is so so so wonderful whether it is Bird singing or Paper Buyer shouting. We should know to enjoy. It's all in the Mind. You have it.

Nice picture...Thank you. Adnan,