Vijay Sai

Rookie - 307 Points (30 12 1975 / Trichy, South India)

Paradise Lost - Poem by Vijay Sai

I woke, I woke, with moist eyes,
Oh! I don’t know
that would be my last awakening!
I found myself
in a journey of paradise,
rendezvous with pleasure,
For now I noticed that,
I’ve been discarded
this time,
Oh! no! not again,
I flew to nest, yet again,
in this world of unexpecting soberness,
awaiting to strike at which stroke-
and when!
to be a free bird,
lost out of vision in the blue sky-
Yet another dawn after dusk,
blooming with a dream!

Comments about Paradise Lost by Vijay Sai

  • Gold Star - 6,405 Points Paul Sebastian (9/24/2015 6:52:00 AM)

    With dawn another awakening, blooming with a dream. A beautiful write, Vijay! The allusion and your writing style is commendable. (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,181 Points Leloudia Migdali (8/31/2014 10:44:00 AM)

    Lovely poem! Nice wording! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,440 Points Louis Borgo (1/7/2013 5:08:00 PM)

    i like the way you write i can hear some me in you brillant (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 11 Points Derek Haughton (12/28/2012 6:10:00 AM)

    Went to the trouble of writing a sensible critique but this silly website kept insisting that the verification code was wrong although carefully copied several times. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 55 Points Jackie Osae (12/28/2012 5:37:00 AM)

    Vijay this is a beautiful piece, and you're obviously very talented. Keep writing, as practice makes perfect (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,394 Points Tajudeen Shah (11/29/2012 10:35:00 AM)

    your lost paradise is limited to a dream, and still it is vivaciously fine in its succession. the poetic galore is well-maintained, and deserves much appreciation. the only thing i am not very happy is the limited content. thats ok. may be because, i had great expectation from the title, when you jotted me. wonderful. great to know you, dear Vijay. i just posted a few, if time ever permits, please bless. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 36,928 Points * Sunprincess * (11/12/2012 11:13:00 PM)

    these lines are fabulous. :)
    Yet another dawn after dusk,
    blooming with a dream! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alex Dim (8/6/2012 9:42:00 PM)

    i like it...nice.... keep it up, (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Uzma Jamil (7/21/2012 4:14:00 AM)

    sai you have rising thoughts................keep writing (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Rainbow Princess (7/17/2012 10:05:00 AM)

    its beautiful and yeah you have good ideas.i like it.anyway keep it up as writting helps and thanks for inviting me to read your poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Rainbow Princess (7/17/2012 10:02:00 AM)

    its beautiful i love it! ! for each people its different way.and thanks for inviting me to read your poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 22 Points Lasoaphia Quxazs (6/21/2012 1:28:00 PM)

    Good thought. I remember 48 years ago I read a book of Paradise Lost, Paradise Regained. When I finished it with a very little knowledge of English language, I was ready for paradise.
    However, it is our human being that we look for the paradise, but if you check out my poems, until we are in this Earth we never have it. Life is a school room, where we get lessons. If we solve one, we go to the other one. We can arrive to a peace in our soul and true happiness but we still have to solve our every day upcoming problems. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Vincent Kuo (5/28/2012 10:49:00 AM)

    Thank you for this lovely poem, involving vivid imagination! I suppose we all have our paradise where and when we choose to. For many, this abstract concept lies in poetry and the rich introspective consciousness we get to explore as poets...My I invite you to read my poem The Poet which incorporated another type of proverbial paradise I think you may enjoy! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,483 Points Shahzia Batool (5/28/2012 10:27:00 AM)

    A melodramatic modernised manipulation of the title of the Old Classic piece... An arresting poem.... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Alafe Ramat (5/28/2012 7:31:00 AM)

    Nicely penned and quite wonderful, thumps up. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Oludipe Oyin Samuel (5/28/2012 6:34:00 AM)

    Good piece. Striking! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 25 Points Leena Sharma (5/28/2012 2:12:00 AM)

    It's really awesome! ! ! !
    you have done total justice with the vocabulary and verse! ! !
    Appreciable! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 822 Points Pen Anthony (5/2/2012 1:44:00 PM)

    nyc piece....i love it and hope your students do too (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Claudia Krizay (5/2/2012 5:59:00 AM)

    This is beautiful! I love it- (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 173 Points James ivan Almalvez(ice Prince) (5/1/2012 6:21:00 AM)

    This is great! ! Good job :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, June 13, 2009

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