Vijay Sai

Rookie - 58 Points (30 12 1975 / Trichy, South India)

Eternal Bird - Poem by Vijay Sai

Every evening
When the sun is setting deep
When the cloud is turning from
Bizarre blue to orange red
When the clock is showing half past five
Its time I waited for my pet
In my garden and near my water filled well
It came as I expected
Flying over here from nowhere
Sitting on my well
Shouting mildly for its regular food
I threw a couple of biscuits
Being old and not able to swallow
It blinked here and there
Then, as water came from the ditch
It soaked its food until it is well done
And fit enough for consumption
Satisfied, it looked here and there again
Wings flirting, it started to fly
Towards nowhere from here, from my home!
Guess my pet? It’s none other than my eternal crow!


Comments about Eternal Bird by Vijay Sai

  • Gold Star - 4,988 Points Walterrean Salley (9/10/2014 6:21:00 PM)

    Keen observations. Love how you've held your train of thought, safely guiding the reader at every turn. Nicely done. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Charles M Moore (12/18/2012 12:01:00 PM)

    curious interpretation of some words, Interesting read, enjoyed. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Kathrin P. (10/7/2012 12:41:00 PM)

    you have touched my heart :) very beautiful poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 120 Points Persian Khushi (10/6/2012 4:14:00 PM)

    beautifully composed and flow of words (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Susanta Pattnayak (10/6/2012 1:26:00 PM)

    Though the 'eternal' thing a little bit mysterious it was a good read. Keep writing.. and thank you for the invitation. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,674 Points Hazel Durham (10/6/2012 1:09:00 PM)

    You tell a tale so well, very original, great write! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,220 Points Sallam Yassin (10/6/2012 1:09:00 PM)

    nice flying bird
    who came from nowhere
    this poetry personal
    is quit unique
    and fine
    well done
    my friend god bless u (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Peyton Webb (10/6/2012 12:46:00 PM)

    It very good I loved the imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 385 Points John Brown (10/6/2012 12:37:00 PM)

    Interesting poem Vijay. I like the oxymoron 'shouting mildly' (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nilufer Dursun (5/17/2012 4:53:00 AM)

    Interesting and fantastic...I like this poem.

    Nilufer Dursun (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Simon Collins (5/3/2012 2:51:00 PM)

    A lovely picture in my mind, thank you Vijay (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Stevens Cadet (4/19/2012 1:01:00 PM)

    I was drawn to keep reading to find the missing clue in figuring out the meaning of this and I found it in the end. Good poem (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,010 Points Dr.tony Brahmin (6/17/2010 5:50:00 AM)

    Towards nowhere from here, from my home!
    Guess my pet? It’s none other than my eternal crow!



    what do u mean by eternal crow......... it is mysterious. You are trying to give expression to something in u or your desire or secret passion.. tell me wht is this eternal crow (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 50 Points Erica Santana (6/14/2010 7:07:00 PM)

    It was well described (Report) Reply

  • Rookie zeo little bird (5/23/2010 3:24:00 PM)

    great poem i think it has a great poetic flow (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mike Schliemann (5/21/2010 8:42:00 PM)

    i enjoy the energy in this poem, good use of strong meaningful words (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Michael Brock (4/21/2010 8:31:00 AM)

    Fantastic, beautifully written

    You poetry is so full of passion and strong wording
    wonderful

    thanks for sharing
    Michael (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivette T (12/19/2009 10:21:00 PM)

    love your poem 'eternal bird' it has a very poetic flow and i can imagine your home as i read keep on writting send me a message when you have written a new poem (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anthony Spiros Mcgilvra (12/7/2009 3:31:00 PM)

    ok? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?
    let me guess
    its PERSONAL (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jesurobo-owie Gift Imafidon (12/7/2009 1:49:00 AM)

    Nice poem, very natural and ever flowing.keep writing! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, August 5, 2009

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 22, 2011


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