Rigzin Namgyal

Rookie - 137 Points (9 may / India)

Your Smile - Poem by Rigzin Namgyal

O breathe a word
or two of fire
smile as if those words
should burn me

..seeing your smile..
..the seas caught fire.
..fishes started flying..
..this planet ripped open....
..and the moon emerged..
..from the chest of the earth....
..hundreds of madmen..
..danced at this glorious sight..
..seeing your smile..
..poetry rose to its epitome.
..it gained further heights..
..as your smile got wider...
..thousands of adages became meaningless..
..for words escaped from languages..
..and burned at the altar of your smile..
..seeing your smile..
..hundreds of dervishes began to dance..
..not knowing what they were dancing about..
..but just because you cared to smile..
..Sages finally attained their spiritual liberation..
..and the whirl of the Sufi's became more menacing..
..for madness radiated from the skin of your smile..
..seeing your smile..
..the might of one thousand armies was destroyed..
..and the cavalry of one thousand cannons silenced..
...the roar of one thousand lions subdued...
..and the glory of the ancient kings reduced to rubble..
..for the arrows of your smile vandalized everything on its way..
..seeing your smile..
..a spirit entered inside this poet to flesh these lines..
.. for these lines ran like blood in his body..
..and he found the key to the secret of all languages..
..that he had always wanted to unlock..
..and unleash the poem of his poems..
..but in your smile..
...also lay hidden the last line of this poem..
..now that you don't seem to smile..
..this poem will forever remain unfinished.
..and this poem..like this unknown poet..
..will decay in obscurity...: (: (


Comments about Your Smile by Rigzin Namgyal

  • Rookie - 139 Points Romeo Della Valle (1/1/2014 8:16:00 PM)

    Powerful! A deep and touching write that clearly shows your talent and great feelings magically filtered through this thought provoking write! 10+++ I really enjoy it and I hope you keep it up! Please, keep enriching the Poetry World with more of your inspirational works! If time permits, please, check my latest posted poem titled: Poetic Justice and I hope you like it and enjoy! Regards from New York City (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 339 Points Vipins Puthooran (10/25/2013 6:19:00 AM)

    to say 'tis a magnum opus/ well-done! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 55 Points Hezekiah Toheeb Tiamiyu (10/20/2013 5:47:00 PM)

    nice poem....well smiley written (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (10/19/2013 9:36:00 AM)

    Too often we underestimate the power of a touch, a smile, a kind word, a listening ear, an honest compliment, or the smallest act of caring, all of which have the potential to turn a life around.
    beautiful sir well done (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 120 Points Persian Khushi (10/13/2013 12:07:00 AM)

    yes am smiling too. A fantastic write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 51 Points Neetha Sasidharan (10/10/2013 9:19:00 AM)

    hats off man...hats off....jst grt....superb.....such a grt poem on such a simple yet romantic topic.....go on...... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 21,770 Points * Sunprincess * (10/9/2013 4:33:00 PM)

    thanks for the invite...how could anyone not smile for you..
    this poem is a true work of art, a real masterpiece and
    you had me entranced until the last stanza, which I would
    change to keep the magic in the poem and a smile on the
    face of the reader... :) .. I love unwritten soul's comment! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 133 Points Allemagne Roßmann (10/6/2013 3:28:00 PM)

    lot of fresh energy in the smile (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,458 Points Unwritten Soul (10/6/2013 10:38:00 AM)

    I sealed my poem with my smile...so it never down for you but smile forever :) _SOul (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (10/6/2013 9:48:00 AM)

    a smile can enchant many. As in your poem turn into sadness. A lovely write with good imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,632 Points Hazel Durham (10/6/2013 8:31:00 AM)

    A smile has a power to hypnotize and enchant, you have beautifully expressed such a smile with a sad ending!
    Superb write! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,999 Points Neela Nath Das (10/6/2013 1:28:00 AM)

    Wow! Thousand
    ships will get drowned
    if they see this smile.
    Exaggerated beauty........Simply fabulous.10 +++ (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,236 Points Patricia Grantham (10/5/2013 10:28:00 PM)

    A radiant smile can do wonders to those around you. A smile
    is just a frown turned upside down. It takes more wrinkles to
    frown than to smile. When you smiling th whole world smiles
    with you. keep smiling and keep penning. Enjoyed. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 5, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, October 14, 2013


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