I’m sitting here so far away, lonely yes, but just today.
Tomorrow starts another page, inside this hot, oppressive cage
that keeps the bills and charges paid, yet more despair from it is made.
Away from you I don’t feel whole, I’ve lost a large part of my soul
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I like the structure of the poem and the way it rhymes twice on a line. I must try myself. I could never write such a long poem, not usually anyway. This poem is full of hope as you say and its content perhaps implies you have been through bad times (we all have) . In fact you say that at one point. I am left wondering if the lady and you got together. I hope so. Even if not there is nothing wrong with dreams and aspirations. Out of interest I was listening to Free Nelson Mandella when I was reading your poem.....