Monday, August 21, 2006

Autumn Leaves Comments

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Autumn leaves falling down
Gently drifting round and round
Brown and yellow ones, red ones too
Swirling, curling with the wind
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Hannah Rippon
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Daniel Tyler 21 August 2006

How original, Hannah. I love the line 'swirling, curling with the wind'. I would change 'around and around' to 'round and round' to smooth the flow but otherwise, the rhythm is lovely. I'm most impressed.

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