Tuesday, August 27, 2019

By The Lake Comments

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How beautiful would it be
To have a home in a place
Where I can experience such
Serene mornings by the lake
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Tumisang Ramarea
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Laila Rahman 27 August 2019

nice ending with the pun " bye the lake! " . I do wish you had added a hint of the changing friendship or an introduction of that part of the poem's meaning towards the end like a cliffhanger. I say this because I do not get the feelings of love except for the love of nature unless that is what you intended. :)

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Tumisang Ramarea

Tumisang Ramarea

Kanye, Botswana
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