Thursday, January 2, 2003

Death Creeping Thru The Window Comments

Rating: 1.5

As you lie in your bed sweat falls from
your head.
Your curtains sway in the breeze, but
no window is open so your hopin
...
Read full text

Marcia Nicole Sonnier
COMMENTS
Marcia Morris 30 June 2007

should have gone deeper, use more emotions to tell this story of Death creeping in. Give more details about the window, tell how death creeps in....in what motion, slowly, fast, quickly. How does it feel, what is your reaction.Lying there without a motion...are you cold? do you see fear?

0 0 Reply
Marcia Nicole Sonnier

Marcia Nicole Sonnier

El Sobrante, California
Close
Error Success