i thought it worked
you know with the two of them
i was wrong and sorry
i should have never laughed
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Excellent! I love the way you are obviously talking about a major issue, that makes the reader more and more inclined to read on and find out what it is and you end it with 'I thought it worked' which is a massive cliffhanger. Really great work.
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