Plums Forgive William Carlos Williams Comments

I am admitting something right away: I prefer your variation to Williams's original. Williams wrote a kind of model poem for a new literary age by paring away all excess and sentimentality. What's left is just barely the essential and it expresses a naked truth. Your poem clothes that nakedness with context without losing the truth. It makes the relationship between the speaker and the sleeper much deeper and the truth of their rapport permeates your poem. Williams's speaker is just a ghost whereas yours has presence and personality. And I love the closing two lines which add flesh and feeling. to the speaker's identity. He knows there is something more to this small experience and he will have to deal with that unknown factor later. speaker's