Good job Venus Fire!
The first stanza is good, but has more lines which don't rhyme. I feel you could do better with that part. But overall a good write!
This is just my advice or opinion, see what others think before changing.
I have a similar poem called From the Four Winds. Check out if time permits- mostly about directions not the source. So I like what you've done with this one.
Frank
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Good job Venus Fire! The first stanza is good, but has more lines which don't rhyme. I feel you could do better with that part. But overall a good write! This is just my advice or opinion, see what others think before changing. I have a similar poem called From the Four Winds. Check out if time permits- mostly about directions not the source. So I like what you've done with this one. Frank