Friday, February 27, 2009

Sound Of The Wind Comments

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The sound of the wind
of which you hear
daily charms in the midnight air
through and through it comes again
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Venus Fire
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Frank Simon 27 February 2009

Good job Venus Fire! The first stanza is good, but has more lines which don't rhyme. I feel you could do better with that part. But overall a good write! This is just my advice or opinion, see what others think before changing. I have a similar poem called From the Four Winds. Check out if time permits- mostly about directions not the source. So I like what you've done with this one. Frank

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