Val Tkk


The Rolling Hillsides Of My Tongue - Poem by Val Tkk

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  • (6/25/2006 2:10:00 PM)


    This contains more than a germ of a poem, Valsa.

    I find myself wondering if there is a sadness concealed it it.

    Hence this possible alternation (forgive the temerity):

    The Rolling Hillsides of my Tongue


    Is that a tear running down my cheek?
    Valleys and ridges are the immovable sky
    above the rolling hillsides of my tongue.
    Don't you know? I never cry.

    In them lies a song unsung
    about the sparks that flood my being
    down to the tail of my spine.
    Is that a tear running down my cheek?

    The thought of your mouth making sweet
    love to mine still makes me sigh.
    Is that a tear running down my cheek?
    Don't you know? I never cry.
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  • (6/19/2006 4:35:00 AM)


    I celebrate your talent! Inspiring! (Report) Reply

  • Milly Hunter (5/26/2006 11:12:00 PM)


    The sign of real genius is originality. As such, this reminds me of a tapestry setting which I drew in fifteen minutes, but took me a year to complete, with its diversified patterns of tapestry interwoven which reflected my peaceful abode.

    Actually, when I ascribe 'THE KISS, ' at the time there was very little about this wondrous topic. And still today, there is little which ascribes such a wonder with uniqueness of design. I'd say you definitely qualify for an award with this masterful masterpiece; for originality if nothing else. Bravo~, a most enjoyable read!

    ~Milly M. Hunter
    (The KISS :) http: //www.your-poetry.com/modules.php? name=News&file=article&sid=120788 (@ Your Poetry Dot Com)
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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (5/23/2006 11:46:00 PM)


    THE PASSION WITHIN, VALSA...AWESOME IMAGERY...DETAILS ON HIGH PITCHED SENSE...DON'T GO MELTIN THE SITE DOWN, NOW, VALSA!
    FINE CRAFTSMANSHIP...PEN AWAY, YOUNG LADY V.!

    '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''~F. J. R.~''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
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  • K. Jared Hosein (5/12/2006 2:29:00 PM)


    A picturesque and sensual piece about the beauty, effect and vastness of a kiss, placed into suitable metaphors, and punctuated by a jilted end. A clever, wonderful read.

    - K.
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  • Charles M Moore (5/11/2006 7:34:00 PM)


    Excellent and beautfuly clever write. (Report) Reply

  • (5/11/2006 6:41:00 PM)


    This is gorgeous. Thank you for alerting me. I'm totally entranced. (Report) Reply

  • Brian Dorn (5/11/2006 9:14:00 AM)


    Valsa, a very well crafted poem with unique images... plus an interesting twist at the end. Good write! !
    Brian
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  • (5/11/2006 5:03:00 AM)


    A nice flow and a confident style, a little clever nudge at the end, with a title that is the most original image of the whole poem. (Report) Reply

  • (5/11/2006 3:56:00 AM)


    The imagery here is a delight. Great imagination, sensuality and a hint of mystery/misery? A wonderfull write.
    Danny
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  • (5/11/2006 3:17:00 AM)


    this is so great, your mouth making love to mine that is awesome...... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, May 11, 2006

Poem Edited: Tuesday, December 3, 2013


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