The Window To The Soul Comments

I can see where your point of view is coming from Tony, as I did have the same feeling when writing it, but at the same time, the person it is meant to be focused on, needs the point to be obvious in order for them to understand... so the last line is obvious for the purpose of its subject, if you can see where I am coming from. In ending it with the message at the beginning it brings it to a full circle. There is method to my madness. Thankyou for you comments.

Just thought, Gracie Lou but we know the 'eyes are the window to the soul' saying so well, and you 'play' the picture so effectively throughout the poem, do you really need to re-state it at the end - it makes it a bit too obvious? For what it is worth, I thought the punctuation in the last line of the previous stanza and leaving it hanging on a one-word sentence: 'Forever' (and without a full stop at the end so the reader can see it stretching on) , might be an interesting alternative ending? We also sometimes use 'Forever' as the ending salutation in a letter, which could make it doubly poignant. Anyway, that's what I thought when I read it....; forever, TJ