Sumita Datta

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Without You (Part-Ii) - Poem by Sumita Datta

Without you I feel myself…
Completely empty
I feel standing alone
Like a burnt candle

Nothing to see…
Nothing to show
Nothing to glance
Nothing to blow

My heart stops breathing,
My mind stops blowing……
My lips stop blooming…
My eyes stop glowing…

I forgot how to smile! ! !
I have lost all emotion…
My mind has become
A flame without sensation

I forgot how to talk…
When I try to talk…
I feel my lips drying
The way pen dries without ink…

I have become a messenger
With no message….
I have become a creature
With no image…

Without you
I feel myself not whole
Without you
I am not a complete soul…

Comments about Without You (Part-Ii) by Sumita Datta

  • Gautam SenGautam Sen (3/12/2010 1:03:00 AM)

    This part is also very good, rather more metaphoric. Effectively spoken from your heart. Your poem made me realize a thing that may be a poet expresses best when he or she finds himself or herself in the kingdom of loneliness. Right na?

    Keep it up.

    Gautam Da.

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  • Dr. Ratan BhattacharjeeDr. Ratan Bhattacharjee (1/25/2010 12:39:00 PM)

    only 'show' rhyming with 'blow' sounds artificial, otherwise the rhyming is excellent. Continuation of thought sustains the love mood beautifully...I liked the two parts and enjoyed reading. No, no, u know good rhyming... (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, October 13, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, October 13, 2008

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