Fixed eyelids
Falling gait
No gesture
Erect posture
Restless ever
Counting seconds
Waiting to quit
Struggling to hold
An on-going conversation
Everything in life
Seems so hard
To acquire, but
Still fights
To survive
One more day!
A sense of postponement of the inevitable pervades the poem. Like it. -Baru Gobira
Good one great one, although i am battlilng to understand the tittle, oh but thats poetry i keeps you on your toes everytime in search for sense and meaning of our surroundings, this means to me you are a good write, since you can intrigger thought.love Da Maiz.w! (the victim)
Nicely structure short style of poetry. Though I think the pacing to the end could be sharper. However a good piece of work overall.
i really really like this :) one thing i don't like is the exclamation point at the end..idk i just feel like it takes something away from the rest of the poem. taht's just my suggestion though. again, really really good poem <3 hope to see more.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Nice, simple, and to the point. Nicely worded too. I liked it. Thanks for the read.