Shahzia Batool

Veteran Poet - 1,201 Points (Pakistan)

My Scattered Thoughts Ii - Poem by Shahzia Batool

i experience daily growth, daily change
some addition, some subtraction,
some division of spirit, multiplication of all my selves
some positive, some otherwise
(negative is a harsh word but is there any harm in admitting it?)
but it keeps me going...this change, this growth
what i was, i am not, somebody said,
what i am, i shall not be
but one regret will be there,
i shall lose the essential Me, i love the most, yet i'm not a narcissist
the world is a great teacher,
though the world is a bad teacher...
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why is the subject of Life compulsory?


Comments about My Scattered Thoughts Ii by Shahzia Batool

  • Rookie - 152 Points Muhammad Ali (1/22/2014 3:02:00 AM)

    'zindgi khelti hy saanson sy.
    Mot tmasha dekhti hay abhi.'
    ...
    I think, a body can die. How a wish can die! Wish relates with life.
    It is a game play. Actually we are not game makers. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 9,619 Points Bri Edwards (9/14/2013 4:21:00 PM)

    shahzia,
    i shall lose the essential Me, i love the most, yet i'm not a narcissist
    the world is a great teacher,
    though the world is a bad teacher...
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    why is the subject of Life compulsory?

    MY THOUGHTS ON THE ABOVE:
    i wonder what you mean by the essential Me, I love the most. why will you lose it? ? ? and might not a NEW essential Me be as good or better?

    i like:
    the world is a great teacher,
    though the world is a bad teacher...
    - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - ......a subject for a new poem? ? ? ?

    in my opinion the subject of life is NOT compulsory for an adult who has the ability to end it....(don't mention the D word! ! !) . of course there can be lots of pressure from religious beliefs and family and laws and rules etc. to keep one living when living is unpleasant. and if one is feeling life is not worth continuing, i would suggest some counseling before the final decision is made. IT IS FINAL i believe! it is also a good suggestion to sleep on it and not make the dicision while intoxicated. thanks for sharing. bri :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,619 Points Bri Edwards (9/14/2013 4:10:00 PM)

    Valerie Dohren wrote in her comment: Life is a constant challenge, a road with many diversions, some leading to a positive outcome, others more negative - a leaning process, at the end of which...... who knows? ! !
    i think she meant to write learning, not leaning. BUT leaning is appropriate here as well. we all lean on other people or things (including thoughts) from birth to death. it is good to have something to lean on sometimes, AND to offer others a chance to lean on us sometimes. thanks for sharing, Shahzia and Valerie and the others who commented and ph. :) (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,307 Points Walterrean Salley (4/18/2013 11:34:00 PM)

    Life is our greatest experience - in every way. A gorgeous poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 2 Points Lasoaphia Quxazs (4/18/2013 6:50:00 AM)

    You are right, we are growing every second. And the world is a bad teacher if you look at this way. Always good to look at everything, let it be good or bad, that what did we learn from it. Then you will see, that life is what you expect of it. The best is not to follow those who you do not approve. Believe that everything works for your good, and it will. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Frank James Davis (4/17/2013 3:38:00 AM)

    Yes, Shahzia, for most of us, life is compulsory; also, always compelling.
    Good or bad, life appears to be the only real teacher.
    Outstanding work! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,938 Points Lyn Paul (4/13/2013 12:36:00 PM)

    Very interesting scattered thoughts, thought many of us are thinking. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 24,732 Points Valsa George (4/13/2013 2:05:00 AM)

    Whether we like it or not, life teaches us many lessons and often we have to change against our will! ! We continue to grow through addition, multipliction and even substraction! This is a great write, so enjoyable! For this you deserve a 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jen Walls (4/12/2013 5:52:00 AM)

    Beautiful in so many ways...especially in the coming to terms with life's deep soul and its growth and education. Love this write very much Shahzia! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,671 Points Valerie Dohren (3/7/2013 4:00:00 PM)

    Life is a constant challenge, a road with many diversions, some leading to a positive outcome, others more negative - a leaning process, at the end of which...... who knows? ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Terence George Craddock (3/6/2013 9:39:00 AM)

    Your scattered thoughts seem to be searching for a formula for life, considering first addition subtraction division then multiplication, shifting into positive negative as formulas for change growth. The phrase the sum is more than the total of all the parts, seems appropriate as you shift into philosophy, but it keeps me going...this change, this growth recognizes the inevitable necessity of change.

    As Shakespeare said

    All the world's a stage,
    And all the men and women merely players:
    They have their exits and their entrances;
    And one man in his time plays many parts, ....

    A philosopher might have said, if trying to state the question of life in terms of poetic philosophy

    what i was, i am not, somebody said,
    what i am, i shall not be
    but one regret will be there,
    i shall lose the essential Me, i love the most, yet i'm not a narcissist

    The shift from what i was, i am not, is interesting, because it has been said we are all three separate facets, which define yet do not define our character and personality. First what we think we are, second what others think we are, and finally what we really are. In the first self appraisal, some individuals are more honest and aware of what defines them than others, a few fall short more due to ego and self deception. The second what others think of us has many variations, due to our personality and character shifts over time. Also the perspective of viewers determined as; family, especially parents siblings, good friends or false friends, and analysis by those with superficial data, will shift the opinion of what others think we are markedly. Lastly to determine what we really are, extended even into a judgement weighing of our souls; this would require an all knowing God to access.

    Your statement i shall lose the essential Me, is an extension from what you are, to losing the essential me; the you as an essential part of yourself that should not be lost. His raises questions we can address. Do you have to lose, sacrifice an essential you? Can you not above all else, to thy own self be true? Is it necessary to compromise beliefs? This merges into reasons for compromise and sacrificing belief. The character and will of those who will and will not compromise, and the degree of compromise, the changes this must force in us; change that may creep in over time, even years, versus sudden dramatic changes.

    The declaration yet i'm not a narcissist; defines an extremely interesting question between self awareness and self appreciation, contrasted with narcissism. Key here is can we love others if we do not love ourselves? The turn the world is a great teacher, / though the world is a bad teacher is both true and profound. The world has incredible life lessons to teach, some may live extremely long lives and learn little or nothing, while others learn unique insights in a short lifespan.

    Why? Because some are willing to learn and embrace life, while others, stubborn angry resist all learning and forgiveness? In philosophy this would perhaps encompass concepts like plenty, excess, ease and greed, which may teach little except selfishness; while adversity and tragedy impacting upon individuals with faith, strength of character etc; may or will learn universal insights and wisdom, through the awful grace of God? An interesting poem to reflect on. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (3/5/2013 10:51:00 AM)

    Another scattered but meaningful thoughts, Shahzia. This world is because of life and life is both bad and good teacher. One has to distinguish clearly. And one who loses I/me keeping vanity and selfpride.aloof, she/he is winner always. Life is thus a necessary subject to study. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (3/3/2013 12:16:00 PM)

    scattered thoughts made an splendid point and gave a solid gold by a super poet

    bravo mam (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Www.poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 Search 2 (3/1/2013 4:22:00 PM)

    Not just scattered thoughts... these are the spilt beans of life and living that one has to pick up and learn from. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sun Shine (2/28/2013 8:28:00 AM)

    one has to pass the compulsory paper ;)
    very great :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sun Shine (2/28/2013 8:27:00 AM)

    one has to pass the compulsory paper :)
    very great :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 71 Points Indira Babbellapati (2/28/2013 1:20:00 AM)

    scattered thoughts
    get scattered on fertile earth
    healthy seeds of thoughts
    bear flower and fruit

    scatter your thought by all means
    they may surprise you with
    colorful flowers and juicy fruits
    and at times even fold you
    in its shade with branches
    spread far and wide :) (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,228 Points Thomas A Robinson (2/27/2013 4:13:00 PM)

    All we are is the vibration of molecules.
    May they bring a tune of happiness to you. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,860 Points Dave Walker (2/27/2013 2:41:00 PM)

    We try to be all we can be, but something always
    gets in the way, a great poem. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 27, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, March 15, 2013


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