Seventeen Though Seventy One Poem by Akhtar Jawad

Seventeen Though Seventy One

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The crazy old man, playing cricket on the streets,
With his blocked shoulders and his painful knees,
His spouse warning from the roof of of his house,
Great spectators, singing clouds and dancing trees,

On the television of the clouds' wide screens
The sick old sun was keenly watching the matches,
The old man couldn't read his wise advice,
Just sit and shout on good shots and catches.

Charming fair ladies, rainbows on all the roofs,
Clapping and shouting on the last boundary he hit,
'I am only seventeen and I should now hit a six.'
Though the word uncle didn't like, surely a misfit,

White shirt, white trousers and the white shoes
The road is slippy after the fine mild rains,
Warnings of spouse from the roof of his house,
'Youth day for others, for you injuries and stains.'

'When you'll realize you are no more a youth.'
'Don't disturb my concentration, let me play,
Sweetheart, see my dashing innings of seventy one,
Let me score a century on the lovely youth day.'

Another four, his supporters' exciting demand,
Two raised hands on the top of a neighboring house!
Gathered all the might in his blocked shoulders,
The grandmother's clever agent, a mighty mouse,

An outgoing delivery kissed his bat, he was caught,
Seeing ball resting in the grandson's safe hands,
Standing on the slips of the crazy old man's life,
Old once again and back to the destined lands.

With his painful knees and his aching muscles,
Doctor advised a bed rest to the teen aged old,
Play with the brain without involving your body,
That is a ground whereat you are still gold.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Valsa George 14 August 2016

The soul is willing, but the body is weak..... We the aged has to accept it! But surely like your sportsmanship....! Enjoyed this interesting write!

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Rajnish Manga 12 August 2016

With the kind of verve and fervor you have displayed on the field, I am sure, Insha Allah, you will score a century in spite of what the doctor says. Thanks for show-casing your cricketing skills which is very well an analogy with life. Thank you, Akhtar Jawad Sahab. A 'glance' on your batting: On clouds' wide screens....The sick old sun was keenly watching the matches, Sweetheart, see my dashing innings of seventy one, Doctor advised....Play with the brain without involving your body,

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 12 August 2016

The sick old sun was keenly watching the matches, Playing with the brain without involving body is not so good for the able bodied seventy one with little bit of pain here and there..Nice concept and the poem..Thank you for sharing

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Kelly Kurt 11 August 2016

I hope you have recovered. I used to be a nationally ranked athlete and even a competitive bodybuilder into my forties. But now at nearly 60, I am out of breath biking across town and sore after a day of yard work. I don't think that will ever stop us tho.: -)

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