Saturday, November 8, 2014

Agony And Uncertainty Comments

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I wonder why we ever need
to complicate and to forbid
Words and thoughts causeth mine bleed
thine doubt and agony has merely feed
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Roseann Shawiak 27 August 2015

Ellirie, you have some good and fascinating thoughts in your poem, they start out very clear then get muddied a bit. Possibly say your poem out loud and listen carefully for the rhythm and meanings to make sure they're clear to others. I often have to do that myself. Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

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