All Yor Pearls Poem by Chelsea Pieterse

All Yor Pearls



I can see your sympathy
You wear it like a string of fake pearls
Hanging on yor ears
As you pretend to listen
Draped around your neck
lying across ypur chest
as you pretend to care
And i can feel your anger
A raging fire of pure fury
It burns in your throat
as you spit firey sentences
It flicks in your eyes
And my soul is it's oxygen

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Raynette Eitel 17 June 2008

You have made good use of your metaphor, Chelsea. Your word 'fake' let's the reader know exactly what that sympathy is made of...your verb, 'pretend' carries the metaphor farthe (although I urge you to find a substitute for the second 'pretend.' This little poem has all it needs to be a real gem. Good work. Raynette.

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