John Kipling Lewis

Rookie (3/12/1968 / Manhattan, KS)

Assiduous Empathy - Poem by John Kipling Lewis

my assiduous empathy
is a cartographer of quintessence

recording, in turn,
everyone of luminescence

the freaks, the geeks and
the passionate creators

the flawed, from abroad and
the erstwhile dictators

their idiolect captured
in meticulous detail

every particular nuance
logged without fail

i converse, it's a curse,
through a mental portal

unsurpassed in contrast
to the actual mortal

Comments about Assiduous Empathy by John Kipling Lewis

  • (11/5/2007 9:23:00 PM)

    I understand where it is going but, I got lost in it (Report)Reply

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  • (11/5/2007 1:16:00 PM)

    6. Works better than some of the others. It just needs more concrete imagery to balance out the wordplay elements (which are fine, just not enough on their own.)

    By now you should be noticing a pattern in my comments. Poems convey experience. Imagery is how experience is conveyed - specifically, concrete, striking, and original details.

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  • (11/5/2007 12:27:00 PM)

    I like the rhythm of it, especially after the first time I read it it seemed to really move well. (Report)Reply

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  • (8/3/2007 6:37:00 PM)

    I like this one, its funny and yet makes you think too. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, February 24, 2006

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