Because We Feel In Love Comments

I see the hand of a great poet in this piece. You are able to manipulate those few words into what could make a story- for a good story writer though. However, I think your strength lies more in the meaning of this poem than in the form, whereas a poem is a poem simply because it is expressed in a condensed and precise and sweetened language. You've done a great job with the poem, Ma.Emmariz and I got the message; but you don't pay more attention to the style. Remember, what makes a poem beautiful is the how; in fact, it is through the beauty of the how that the meaning is mostly realised. How I wish I could help you refine some lines in this poem of yours. Well, if I had my ways, you might have something like this for the first stanza: Oh! immeasurable happiness! If truly love be our aim To that special person whom we adore Then on our blind date Time is as life Well, I just want you to know that I'm always sincere with people's works when I help them out. I think I shouldn't have bothered on us. Or should I?