Wednesday, September 28, 2005

Big Easy Comments

Rating: 4.0

Magnolia-honey air, heavy with heat.
Kudzu vines twining, knitting the city.
Spanish moss masks the old hoyden,
and she manages to think herself pretty.
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Sherry Asbury
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Richard Quinby 28 September 2005

Very nice, some great images of a wonderful city. Nice use of chain rhymes and alliteration. The first line is wonderfully lyrical. The 4th stanza is so good overall that the line “Charm oozes from the Big Easy’s pores” may seem (to me) more unoriginal and clichéd than it really is. Just a nitpicky thing, but is there Kudzu in New Orleans? Hoyden, I love that word NOW that I looked it up... I gave this an 8, for my taste the poem would have been stronger if you had worried less about rhyming and more about word choice

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