Denton Tap And Sandy Lake Comments

I Like this Hubert. There is a certain tension to the narrative, that I feel is hightened by the ryhme structure. that is quite unusual as we normally associate rhyme with lyicism and thus pleasantry. It works against that, but provides a strong impact. I love the opening line but I wonder if you would consider doing a James Joyce and leaving out the apostrophe from 'W's'. Though I know what you mean, as I'm sure many will, taking out the apostrophe would, i feel, give a certain amout of ambiguity that could add to the tension. (I'm thinking about the way the last two wars are written down; ' WW'. It is just an idea. I think this is a great poem all the same.