Fairytales Are For Fools Poem by Jennifer K

I thought the flow of the ending could have come from the beginning... 'her life was happy and bright'.

White, to gray, to black. Liked the way you had it change from bright and joyful to intensely sad very quick. Creates more of an impact.

Sop many, if not all of your poems are themed on suicidal, terminally deperate condition & measure....You have natural talent for the Written Woprd, and there is absolutely nothing wrong with penning your mind. However, you also must remember, that if you are really serious about your literary work, as opposed to just creatively venting for yourself....that by establishing yourself as a1-Dimensional writer, you are polarizing the mass majority of Reader's of Poetry who 'en masse', either are not pulled to your same-theme style (no matter how well it may be written) , or that it eventually becomes repetitious to them, and so they stop reading yopu regularly...Mix it up...Diversify yourself. You have the skill-set...Use it, young lady! Good Luck! FjR

obviously a woman in pain...full of dreams but was not given proper time and caress....

wow. pretty intense and very very sad. i agree with you. many 'once upon a time's never have a 'happily ever after' and the 'happily ever after's you hear makes life seem like a joke sometimes. but then again, some of the greatest art pieces are produced during the harshest times. i mean, during the Dark Ages, Italy produced Dante, or as they call him, the Supreme Poet, while Switzerland's greatest achievement, during that same century, was the invention of the cuckoo clock. so keep living, keep breathing and keep writing. btw, i loved the way the beginning matched the end. very very nice. :)

It was thoughtful to begin with 'once upon a time' in imitation of fairytales. It's a very sad poem though. Nice contrast used and a poignant ending.