Monday, September 13, 2010

Field Ambulance In Retreat Comments

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A straight flagged road, laid on the rough earth,
A causeway of stone from beautiful city to city,
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May Sinclair
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Robbie Fry 06 August 2020

What I do not comprehend is how an army can be 'proud in retreat' when it is marching 'forward to battle'? At least that is my impression of her line, 'Unhasting, proud in retreat, They smile as the Red Cross Ambulance rushes by'. One edit, I would suggest to Ms.Sinclair, if I dared, would be, 'quarried stone' rather than 'fine stone'; as a metaphorical echo of an animal and its victim, an army and its quarry. 'After the Retreat' is more nuanced and evocative.

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