I want no one to believe what I show
And no one to believe the masks I wear
I really want some one to knock at my door
And rip off the masks from my face, which i fear...
It takes me so long to the mixing up
So why cant you help me, if it costs nothing at all
It would be nice if you push me in the sky and up
So that, I will not be the only one to free fall...
Please help me to get out of my shells oh dear
It would be so cool, 'cause I can't do myself
Please give me a hand, 'cause it hurts which I can't bear
It feels so good, but I feel so naked without the shells I bounded my self...
You should rearrange your poem it lacks a certain flow, punctuation marks are missing AJS
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I would like to translate this poem
Yeah, for real Allan. The idea is very nice for a teenager, interesting but the arrangement is lacking a certain humph. Try writing in free verse that may help tho u still need to make other adjustments. u will realise that when u r writing in stanzas there is the need for rhymes which may not always work well. please note though that when u r writing in free verse it still needs to flow. what may also help is if u write inspirationally, most writers only write at some times, be it when they r sad, lonely, happy etc. find what works for u and use it. good luck! not bad for a teenager though.